Here I write

Here I write

To claim this space

Rest your hand

To stake your place

There have been

Demons and lovers

I have felt

A thousand others

Only one

Never more

Has lain such love

Upon my floor

Caused heart to soar

So rest your hand

to stake your place

See my soul

My one true face

 

Reviews

[Lorraine]

I find some lines a bit awkward to read, but the general poem sounds good. I like its short, circular flow. Nice poem.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Norma M Sutton]

Beautiful. I like the last line the best.

[Lydia Blackwell]

this is really really good. I have a penchant for anything about true loves and soul mates. I completely believe in that!

[Arctic Fox]

besides grammer, it flowed nicely, one long stanza. you might need to break it up. maybe two lines per stanza. The end rhymed added to make it in my mind at least lyrical.

[Jibey]

A pretty poem with a charm about the connexion with the one true lover. The idea of claiming a space to share with him is pleasing... I liked the simplicity and the sincerity of it

[Sean Allen]

I am wondering in you intentionaly put precicely the same number of characters before the key phrase "Only one" as you did after it or if it was entirely by chance? It reminded me of the Vizzini dilemma.

[Gandré]

This is so great. to say - There have been

Demons and lovers

I have felt

A thousand others-----------a demand ne'er has been more charming! Loved this.

[Poetic Beauty]

The rhyme is excellent and the flow is nice. The feeling in the poem is clearly state.

[bubbles]

brilliant. realy enjoyed this