Change the tune

Why always the same,

Never a change, rhythm stays the same

Why repeat the words,

and must they always rhyme

How ridiculous

How dull

 

Can we have a change of pace

Can we call each other rat instead of love or sweet?

Can't you refrain from the I love you's for at least a while

it never means the same when you spead them 'round like butter

especially when I heard you say the same to your mother

 

Why always the same

Can't we do it a little different

Don't tell me that you'd die for me

Couldn't you say you'd run a race or join a football team

you could form a one man band - buy a tamborine?

 

Singing angels and roses, silky sweet words and dreams

 Not to be ungrateful

but sing another song

this girl has had enough

of all that has been done!

Reviews

[octane143]

Lol! This is AWESOME and definately going into my favorites. You forgot to add the "baby" thing, sometimes I wonder if men even know my name!
Can we call each other rat instead of love or sweet?

Don't tell me that you'd die for me

Couldn't you say you'd run a race or join a football team

This is wonderful! You put a smile on my face when I was sure I couldn't smile today! Thank you!

[Poetic Beauty]

I was laughing through part of this poem but I understand what you mean and the last stanza say it all.

[the wretched]

you could form a one man band - buy a tamborine?



lol, i love it! change it up indeed!
well written, and upbeat, with a great message, kudos!

[Sean M. Addams]

i like the thought that you put into this... very nice done ... imagery and flow were great in this piece... overall great job on this one a very impressive piece... fav lines...Can we have a change of pace

Can we call each other rat instead of love or sweet?

Can't you refrain from the I love you's for at least a while

it never means the same when you spead them 'round like butter

especially when I heard you say the same to your mother

[emmajoy]

Never was a truer word said in jest???? What a winner you are, what deep words clothed with fun.

I truly look forward to sharing your thoughts, fun and not so fun in the future. Be true to you and whatever your feelings, no reins, no tethers, be you, feel you.

Welcome. :-)

[Mimozi]

This is a really nice piece. I enjoyed the rhythm and flow and it made me chuckle. I love it when people are able to tackle issues that are quite deep and emotional and important in a light-hearted humorous way, which you have done here brilliantly.
Great work.

[Lee E. Powell]

Yeah! She's had enough! Spice it up a little!! lol
I liked this one. it was cool.

"especially when I heard you say the same to your mother" ...that line was really good.
I dont know anything about poetry. i actually dislike poetry, but i really liked this one. Awesome choice of words here

[Alex Annesty]

How refreshing. I think you've taken a neat approach to the subject, and used some lovely phrases to get your message across. I particularly like the "spread them 'round like butter" metaphor, and the "Couldn't you say you'd run a race or join a football team" line encapsulates the poem's message succinctly and humorously. Good stuff.