Hide and Seek

After a long, long streak of not having anything to write....I'm back...

I just wanna go back to 
playing hide and seek 
with everything in the world. 
So busy, what keeps them
so busy, busybodies

That phrase "as above so below" 
in a waiting room
between the soul and the spirit, 
yet every morning we find
the water's still boiling 

The trace of smoothness,
erosion eyes, on the outside 
looking in, the word 
made flesh, an insomniac 
that is always sleeping 

Kids know that what 
lies under their beds is...

"May I walk you home"

"Do you know the way out of here?" 

Kids ripping apart 
their Christmas presents,
and the adults, 
I think they're 
burning bridges 

An omen
O'men, o men
I am so there 
where I am, 
so there, 
Where I am, 
everybody sleeps in the same room 

To be parallel today 
eyes containing an 
underground city, 
supernatural selection 

Reviews

[Thomas W Case]

Superb work, great use of language and imagery.

[paul sal.....]

even boiling water is ok as long as it is tuned off before the fire starts( hope you fared well through the hurricane , the hurricane that caused Trump to throw paper towels to the estranged homeless residents

[TormentedTales]

I liked the way it ended. Made me have to go back and reread it. Great stuff!

[Chris]

Life as we live it... our crowded silence.

[Nisreen]

I like your style
maybe we are all looking for more
more life in this world we live in

[The Twin Arenas]

"yet every morning we find
the water's still boiling"

good one.

[Frontier]

thanks, long time :)

[Inda]

This is fantastic! You're a great story teller my friend! Captivating and original, which is hard to do these days. Love this back an forth between what seems to be two separate stories, just fantastic!

[Frontier]

thank you so much Inda! wow its been FOREVER ive last logged in :)

[Alessander]

I found this stanza fascinating.

That phrase "as above so below"
in a waiting room
between the soul and the spirit,
yet every morning we find
the water's still boiling

I know you have a philoshcal bend to your heart, so this really drew me in. So above, so below, yet boiling water, that seems like a transition, from water to steam, from cold to hot, from still to bubbling.

Really great way to make the abstract concrete, and something to ponder on.

The o'men o'men made me think of Amens, but in reverese! esp considering the Xmas undertones, christ, etc.

liked the phrase 'erosion eyes' though the grammarian in me wants to change it to 'eroded eyes', but erosion implies a process, not description, so yeah, I can see that (pun intended).

Kids ripping apart
their Christmas presents,
and the adults,
I think they're
burning bridges

Paints the holiday in less festive and more violent manner, and one can probably link it to violent commercialism, and by one, I mean me :)

Supernatural selection also makes one pause. How would ghosts and the such weed out the weak from the strong?

It's a startling idea. I like your ideas.

Glad you're back.

[Frontier]

Hey A!
Thank you, lately I really haven't been writing much, hopefully it's just a "phase" lol.
Im always happy when you review my stuff because you make me conscious of things I didn't even notice while writing! haha!

:)

[Alessander]

I'm your conscious, or the super-ego to your ID (though I know you're more Jungian than Freudian :)

I haven't written much lately either, not anything of worth at least. I posted a sorta surrealist poem on my FB today, which I may post over here perhaps.

Yes. Keep writing. Writers block? Drink vino ;)

[Frontier]

Lol! You' know that actually doesn't seem so far-fetched, haha!

Vino sounds good,
read moreLol! You' know that actually doesn't seem so far-fetched, haha!

Vino sounds good,

thanks.

[charlie]

the waiting room between the soul and spirit is the only thing that really clicked with me in this piece of writing. But to me, is was a huge click, and I tip my hat to you for penning that. the rest...?

[Frontier]

haha!! I'm glad at least one part of it clicked...that's my fav part of it too. Some of my writing seems to come out like this...maybe it is too "layered"
I'm grateful for your input...thanks

[JC]

I felt like I was on a journey through your mind and observations, flashes and sparks strolling, poetic beauty...

[Frontier]

Thank you!