Love give colors, heals, put extra burden, push some one to despair, extremes lead some one to say adieu form his or her life, still the positive aspect of love is dominant than negative aspects, true love is there but many believe it is a mirage, at time practical mindedness better than peripheral love, very thought provoking and nice poem
Love give colors, heals, put extra burden, push some one to despair, extremes lead some one to say adieu form his or her life, still the positive aspect of love is dominant than negative aspects, true love is there but many believe it is a mirage, at time practical mindedness better than peripheral love, very thought provoking and nice poem
Love is the great reversal of oneness, sometimes love is multilayered and fulfilling, other times its a heavy weight, at which time oneness isn't such a bad thing , or something like that
Moving, wonderful work. The rhythmic heartbeat of this poem, the cadence, was deeply felt.
Also, your use of repetition was very effective, reminding this reader again about the power of love's transformation. Good finish too. Left we wondering, about some of different reasons we seek the open skies of love.
I liked the set-up and how you described the emotion of love.
"Love is the great reversal"
I like the term above. Could lead to many places and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
This is fantastic! All these different manifestations of love in such detail, really have an effect and i just love it, had to read it twice to really get all of it, one of my favorites to date.
Your ending is very strong in this poem, and so is the refrain "Love is the great reversal." Love transcends our lives in many ways. We teach our hearts to accept varying degrees of love during our lives. I would say that we experience love on many different levels. By the end, hopefully we can explain that unspeakable reason for existing.
I agree with Jacob that there is a dark current in this piece. Your second and third stanzas really establish that idea with some dark imagery. However, I believe that you bring is back to the light with your last two stanzas. While the speaker does not provide the reader with full closure as to why we exist, they bring us a step closer to that point.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Long time Clockwork, its good to see you back. Thanks for this great review! :)
This poem is so captivating, your opening stanza pulled me in and didn't let go. You find ways to deliver such clever truths that I blush on the inside, very well done! I'm so glad I read, it's almost unspeakable as well.
But I had to say SOMETHING :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
heheh I'm glad it made you blush even if its just on the inside :) thanks Zach!