My mere fate

Another "found poem" using excerpts from Robinson Crusoe and the "Poetic Edda", oral Lit. from Iceland from 1000-1300 BC.

My mere fate

went from the isle

for her lover's flight. In this state

of life, that evil influence,

unmaly thy soul must seem,

so I pulled off my clothes

and took to the water,

old tales should ne'er be told 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the title and the story in the poetry. A perfect ending to a tale of fate. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[paul sal.....]

I would enter the water too!

[Frontier]

;D;D;D;D;D;DD

[paul sal.....]

you singing?

[JC]

interesting that you use bits from other things, kind of like a cut up method, is enjoyable to read your interpretation of the words.

[Frontier]

Just trying out a new approach, thanks Jason

[Inda]

Ohh, secrets one must keep huh? Seems someone spoke out of turn ;)
Love this one, love it's sinplicity and the straightforwardness.

[Frontier]

thanks Inda!

[Rossen]

That be a write fine me lady,blimey bloomin good!


100/100


Rossen

[Frontier]

Hahaha! I've always got time for a good ol' pirates tale ;)

[Sunya]

Did you mean unmanly?
The last line made me smile and kinda warm :)
love the poem frontier :)
beautiful
-Sunya

[Frontier]

It's a word from the text. Thanks Sunya :)

[paul sal.....]

cannot find the definition

[Sibusiso Xtdo Gama]

well this one goes for a lot of intepretation. i like it

[Frontier]

Thank you Sibusio! :)

[Mayank]

amazing metaphors, you can think this from various point of views and make a beautiful story.

[Frontier]

thank again Mayank

[Chris]

I think I would prefer your words and your thoughts telling your story this time... you have a fresh way of expressing your "voice" and it deserves to be heard.

[Tree]

Someone I know once told me a story how at a beach party, fearing her boyfriend was interested in someone else, began to walk into the ocean. Her intention was never to return, but she also wanted him to notice. To save her. Claim her. He never did. It was a story I thought at the time the most beautiful, and sad I ever heard. It will always stick with me.

Your exquisite piece, reminded me of it.


Diego Paz

[Frontier]

Wow...thats truly an unfortunate story, so what happened to her?

Thanks

[Tree]

She was vague about the details, but what I gathered was this. She walked into the ocean until the water came up just below her eyes, took off the rest of her clothing and turned around. Nobody noticed she left. Then she swam out until the bonfire was but a speck. I suspect something inside of her clicked, maybe she decided drowning over him was not something she wanted to gift, and she began to swim again struggling to make her way back to the shore. Up the beach from the party now she borrowed a tee shirt and shorts from a couple and made her way home. I don't think she ever saw him again.


Good to see you active again, Front.


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