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Wrote this when I was about to pass out.. just saw it while searching thru my phone and was a bit surprised.

As your heart desires, 

Here I am

stuck and tired

A kid

that doesn't try to

follow the patterns 

on the floor

The pretty figurine

inside a crystal ball

with fake snow

surrounding it

I feel like the core

of the Earth 

and I'm watching the world 

slowly fall away

each time the sun

touches me more 

and more until

I'm burning

Reviews

[Relic's Bare Trees]

I really like this. There's sort of a psychological layer underneath, whether it is a social anxiety thing I'm or not only you would know. Great poem though.

[Frontier]

thank you Tim :)

[Mai Marquez]

It seems that you were hovering between this world, and the next, found that sweet spot and imagined then composed quite a beautiful poem. I have done this before, tired and worn my mind found a surreal world then began to dwell there. Wonderful write! and oh, I tried to accept a friend request on your part (I think may have sent you one too) but for some reason it won't go through, anyway wanted to let you know I wasn't ignoring it:) I'll try again later, Mai

[Frontier]

Thanks Mai, and I accepted your friend request! :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Jacob your poetry although eloquent and wonderfully constructed has such saddness to it. I feel for you for we both appear to be in a similar position. But soldier on we must.

[Frontier]

Yes indeed, thanks John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sorry abot the 'Jacob' but I am so used to reviewing his work and must have read five or six of his pieces yesterday.

[jzadski]

Beautiful piece. I can absolutely relate with the feeling of being stuck and tired and the effects it has on you. You put those feelings into a beautiful poem. Great work.

[Frontier]

Thanks Jza :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i can relate to this. been through some things lately....and ended up reacting physically....last week, dizziness, everything out of focus...couldn't clearly see someone standing right in front of me....physical effects from emotional and mental effects...

"falling away, being touched, burning" sadness turned to a spinning world"
like being tossed around in a crystalline ball.

[Frontier]

That sounds awful Jacob, hope you get better! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

already am getting there...

your words touched me.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the complete poem. Your statements honest and direct. You create places and thoughts we struggle with daily. I believe most of us question the unknown, our purpose and where we are ending? Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frontier]

Thank you Coyote :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.