The time in these wounds

To finally get to the bottom, 

it's too whole of an ordeal, 

having suddenly arrived, we begin to

walk a path inside.

Until now there had been a

swan of vapor and ice, skimming

down demon skull zone.

Here we are at this dreadful point, 

in lots of time, having to meet our

balding hearts, and the whole world

is covered in mine-fields. 

These wounds are still open, no blood running

down, my head is in my hands, like an innocent

convicted of a crime. 

Reviews

[Zakari Schmidt]

These words cut like razors, deep, very well done. I could feel it, I'm finding myself inspired. Without pain there would be no beauty in life. Captivated

[Frontier]

I'm glad you're feeling inspired because I wanna read more of your work! :)

[Zakari Schmidt]

Haha I hope to post more soon :)

[Inda]

That last line is like a punch in the stomach, really drives the point home and clears up any questions the reader might have too, this is fantastic stuff that is powerful and your use of language makes it a brezze to read.

[Frontier]

Glad you enjoyed, Inda.

[Mayank]

f*****g deep!
these lines are coming from within, disorder. Period.

[Frontier]

thank you mayank :)

[paul sal.....]

hearts are fragile/ life is not, the mines are duds/up

[Frontier]

Life is very strong but it can also be fragile

[Ian Gilmour]

We can run from those who judge us and from the expectations of media outlets and what we see everyday yet we cannot run away from how we feel. This poem does a great job exploring that concept, well done.

[Frontier]

Yes it is about getting to the bottom of those feelings, thanks Ian! :)

[Chris]

I can close my eyes and hear this one...feel the voice and the turns of the thoughts just echoing. A very visual and strong afterimage.

[Frontier]

I like that you could feel it :)

[The Twin Arenas]

yeah, I'm really starting to dig your stuff.

you have a consistent voice.

things like "swan of vapor and ice"
and "demon skull zone"

and "balding hearts"

these aren't happy accidents. keep writing. hard not be on board.

[Frontier]

Yay! Thanks!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. I wanted to know more. You gave enough to keep my attention.
"Here we are at this dreadful point,
in lots of time, having to meet our
balding hearts, and the whole world
is covered in mine-fields. "
The above statement I could create a complete poem with. No weakness in the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Frontier]

Re-reading I also noticed I wanted to read more! Maybe for the next one! Thank you Coyote.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. Always a pleasure to read your words.

[kublakhan27]

I am constantly blown away by the depth of your words, poetically and emotionally...your poetry is always so full of almost transcendent wisdom, and it never fails to speak to me...like Frieda, I loved the 'swan' lines, but the ending was most affecting...an innocent convicted of a crime...I think life has a way of making us all feel like that sometimes...truly heart-wrenching work as always.

[Frontier]

Aww shucks! Thank you Kubla! :)

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure my friend, you're one of my favourites here :)

[Frieda P]

Introspective reflections of our own truths can be quite the wake up call...love your wording, your unique style always gets me thinking....in my own mind field.

swan of vapor and ice, skimming

down demon skull zone

[Frontier]

Haha thanks Frieda!