This is the night

Blending with the night

becoming its shadow,

Who knew this acquaintance

Could  keep me strong

Darkness

Stealth

Vengeance

are my true friends.

Whispers have become my language,

and my footsteps, the wind,

having  made a cocoon

 out of the world’s sin.

My movements are possessed

by dusk, even my body

seems to be animated

by dark matter.  

Human emotions, a library I sit

in during the day and by

night, I try to go unnoticed

by the sun warriors, bearers of fire,

the vibrations of star noise.

The black lake, a midnight mirror

where I spend my hours, tells

me my story in so many ways.

The sun’s rays can’t get to me,

I’m a void and I live to

 cross dimensions,

to stare at you without

eyes and take you with me. 

Author's Note

Guys any commentary is welcome, this is an assignment for school so no shyness lol.

It's supposed to be a persona poem.

Reviews

[FriendlyKittyCat]

Great piece! It sounds very mysterious.

[Richard]

This is a really good poem
very good work

[Zakari Schmidt]

Late review but I thought this was sooo good! Reminds me of an oath you'd recite before joining an assassins guild or something!! Instant favorite by one of my favorites. The ending haunts me frontier I might get it inked on if that's ok :)

[Frontier]

Hahaha! I'd be honored! I was envisioning a character like assasin's guild and this is what came out.
Thanks Zach :)

[Inda]

I see a blurry picture of someone who is going through some hard times and is perhaps unsure or uncertain about her/him self. The comment about being a void is one thing i can identify with, i do like thinking that we are not as important as we think and that is where I connect with that idea. Having said that, i think this piece needs to be read slowly and each line has it's own purpose, as oppose to a means to the end. I love it myself, i like unusual scenarios and thoughts so this is fantastic!

[Frontier]

I like when each line catches the reader's attention, thank you, Inda :)

[Ian Gilmour]

You had some brilliant lines in this and the way you demonstrated paradox was great. The metaphors are prevalent and appropriate. Well done.

[Frontier]

Thanks again Ian!

[paul sal.....]

dark matter !Mulder would relate. a void is dimensionless and you certainly are not !

[Frontier]

lol who is Mulder?

[paul sal.....]

mulder and scully from the X Files

[Jeannette Lunete]

Stunning way of taking the reader into a completely different world. I deeply enjoyed the grace that it includes to create such a clear visualisation of the dark and mysterious. :)

[Frontier]

Thank you Jeanette! I'm glad it transported you.

[fireblossom]

From the point of view of the night creature. A great job. The poem sets the mood and draws the reader into the dark world of our character. I enjoyed reading this. I give you an A+. You tell your teacher to do the same. :-)

[Frontier]

Thank you Fireblossom! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

crossing dimensions, living in the void, in between...much like someone who is in this country, but without a visa...almost like he or she does not really exist...but that person does exist...on his or her own terms...

nicely personified here, Frontier.

[Frontier]

Haha I didn't catch that analogy! But it does fit! Thank Jacob.

[Frieda P]

Killer ending, hauntingly dark albeit beautiful sentiment. Love the 'vibrations of star noise'....

[Frontier]

Thank you Frieda!