NO EXIT sign

You are the

NO EXIT sign

In my life,

If I turn around now,

I’ll have to

Go back through

All the same things

 I’ve seen again,

houses, cars, sidewalks

mailboxes,

just to get back on

The highway,

Where nothing

Can be found,

Speeding by,

Only speed, movement

Surrounding me,

Yes,

You are the

NO EXIT

Sign in my life

I’m going to stop

on parking,

Step out and stretch

And Oh!

What a beautiful view!

Reviews

[JC]

nice! The insight you have here is incredible, the metaphor of a life speeding by on a highway, having to go back instead of forward and having to go through all those same things all over again can be daunting. great read.

[Madison O'Dwyer]

I like the flow of this poem - a wonderful extended metaphor, and it suprised me in the end. I assumed NO EXIT sign would be a negative metaphor but how very wrong I was. I enjoyed this, thanks for sharing!

[Frontier]

Thanks Madison :)

[The Twin Arenas]

cool poem.

at the end there, when it says "I'm going to stop on parking" was that a typo? I'm also a jackass so I just might be missing what you're saying.

I really liked the first half of this piece. "houses, cars, sidewalks, mailboxes" is a nice little line.

you could probably take that "Yes" line out of there.
Maybe even lose the capitals for No Exit? I don't know. What do I know.
It's a cool piece, though. Good idea.

[Frontier]

yeah I'm gonna have to fix that parking line, thanks.

I chose all capitals to make it look like a street sign...

Thanks :)

[Ibreez Shabkhez]

Nice. I offer no critique in particular for this one because it is you in your purest form speaking. We change our writing, our habits, just about anything under the sun, but we do not attempt to change our natures for they are- though at times heterogeneous- the guides which mold our feelings to make them our very own.

[Frontier]

I agree that each person has an inherent "nature" that serves as a basis...and what changes are details.

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

I really like the idea here. People can be exists, and some can not. People are like doorways, really, if one should stop and think about that. And you did. Really brilliant.

[Frontier]

Some are doorways..which are worth going through...thanks Greg

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes that new person in our life can surely give us a fresh perpective....and a beautiful view of what we had been seeing as mundane.

nicely done.

[Frontier]

Thanks Jacob, indeed they can.