Do you know what you want to do?

Do you know what you want to do? 

Dive up into the sky so blue

Grind your bones to make glue

To stick to nothing

What awaits in that bright, empty

room with no walls? 

Where no man will ever dare fall. 

My heart is the one 

that wants to stand tall.

It scorns its golden artery, 

a ghost which does not

live up to its mastery

My heart is the one 

that looks ahead

My heart is the one 

that I dread 

Do you know what you want to do? 

Reviews

[Aethereal]

Your first verse was a gem that inspired me to write this tiny gift poem for you which you may keep as your own. I had to use some of you words to make it work.

Indecision

Do you know what you want to do
grinding your bones to make some glue
diving
driving
through and through
a deep blue view
sticking to nothing,
nothing that‘s true?

[Frontier]

I'm glad it inspired you to make your own poem! Thank you! :)

[Aethereal]

I just wanted to make a little song out of your poem using the "ew" sound.

[Frontier]

Nice! I just sang it with the sound in mind and it flows so well! :)

[Aethereal]

In a few years, perhaps you'll go back over your poems and develop an album of songs from them. Songs don't need to rhyme, but they do need some kind of rhythmic meter where the accents on each line fall in just the correct places to be easily sung, and put to music. If you add a video to the song showing images that relate to the song, then it's all the more valuable.

[paul sal.....]

hold your heart together, any way you can, walls are temporary and will fall, a ghost is a dead being, no sense thinking that way while one is breathing,, there is a love for all of us on the other side of doubt:)

[Frontier]

Haha thank you Paul, I really liked this.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. Gave the feel of the ancient writers. Wanting to draw reaction and thoughts. I like the repetition in the poem.
"Do you know what you want to do? "
The above question is a very good one. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frontier]

Indeed a good question, thanks Coyote :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like all the paradoxes in this.."dive up into the sky"
"glue to stick to nothing"

a freedom to fall upward...all the positive lines about the heart wanting to stand tall, look ahead...and yet
the one she dreads...

a ghost doesn't own its mastery because the past has killed our heart, and now our spirit is so unsure...

so i want to dive up into that empty firmament...free of dread...but that is easier said than done.

[Sami Khalil]

I agree. A gem of a writing. Bravo.......................

[fireblossom]

I like the angles of this. Word choice keeps things off balance and disturbed like an off balance person looking into a mirror colored with slight schizophrenia.

Diving into the sky - grind your bones to make glue that doesn't stick...very tasty.

[Frontier]

thanks a lot for your interesting review

[A. Amos]

It scorns its golden artery
A ghost that does not
own its mastery

This was truly amazing poem and above verses were essence of your poem! Great work

[Frontier]

Yes that is pretty much the essence, thanks.

[A. Amos]

You're welcome

[Kleio13]

"Dive up into the sky so blue
Grind your bones to make glue
To stick to nothing". This poem merits more reviews! Excellent write hun.

K

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this poem really can give me wings. it s really nice. i feel there hope and light . thank you