The finest hour

Dead man walking

Valley to valley

At my finest hour...

sitting in a room,

staring at

myself sitting in a room...

 

 

My will is a malaise, a hot summer day

 

And I’m made of clay

Warm steel to slay

Desolate mold. Multiplicity, cold.

 

Reign of the will

Night of the kill

Reviews

[just Penny]

Excellent rhyming here, sophisticated and eloquent. My fave line has to be "Desolate mold. Multiplicity, cold" - has a nice touch of dark to it. I must admit, I smiled at the irony of the title when I read the content. I think we all have those "finest hours" which we would rather not recall. I really enjoyed this one :) Penny

[Frontier]

Thanks Penny. I like how readers are catching the irony. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good use of statements. Each was strong and stood out. The poem felt like a lead for a good story. You gave grasp of situation and emotion. I like the complete poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frontier]

I'm glad Coyote, thank you.

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

A somber tone in this one Frontier. Some would say, "Dark and mysterious." Dead man walking brought to mind the movie, The Green Mile. That set the tone on the pallet of my thoughts. The execution night. The hour has been set. Apprehension turns to acquiescence.

[Frontier]

Thank you Valormore :)

[paul sal.....]

we,in time, are all waking towards death, the living beforehand molds the outcome

[Frontier]

thank you Paul! :)

[Margo Seuss]

This certainly does have an ironic tone. Sounds to me like somebody is bored!

"sitting in a room,

staring at

myself sitting in a room..."

A fine hour indeed! Good write!

[Frontier]

haha thanks Margo, love your interpretations.

[kublakhan27]

I was fascinated by every image in this piece, which you've brought together with seamless creativity. I can sense the concept in your words but there is a strong element of mystery as well. I enjoyed this one very much...nicely done :)

[Frontier]

Once again thank you for reviewing, I'm very glad you enjoyed.

[Relic]

Hmm, On second thought... :)

[Frontier]

Yes...?
...............

[Relic]

haha, you were waiting for something more weren't you. Well, hmm...
My finest hour...Reign of the will
Night of the kill

Perhaps it is a triumph over weakness. The will now occupying a greater level. Hmm...

[Frontier]

of course I was expecting for more! but I have to keep reminding myself it's best to do away with them in this life! :D And yes I see your perspective and Im gonna affirm it, even though I wrote this without much fore-thought.

[Relic]

Interpretations can change and yet see both sides at the same time. This may be one of them for me personally. I like detail in reviews so that I can see if I'm on the same track as others. Unfortunately it looks like I'm on my own here. :)

[Frontier]

heheheh well I just hopped unto your band-wagon :P

[Relic]

hahahaha. :)

[Relic]

I picture the remnants of a dream from this. The will enshrouded by vines, motivation being squeezed by snakes. And the knife to release their hold in a box five feet away. Just my quick take.

[Frontier]

I see it too! You made it seem like the Ark of the last covenant, like Indiana Jones, nice :)

[Relic]

Yes, that was my first thought.

[isus]

how i love your words, this is fortune, reading art from 'unknown' artists, this is rare here on this page

[Frontier]

thanks Isus...... :3

[Ren Grace]

Very ominous and intriguing. I loved your short effective lines, it makes me think. I really enjoyed the read :)

[Frontier]

Thank you Lauren, glad it makes you think. :)