Mrs. Pale Eyes

An after-life gaze

Cathedral eyes

 

She gave off the feeling of watching a balloon float up into the sky.

 

Suspended out of space and time, unknown substrate,

 devoid of everything and full of everything,

 like gazing out at the ocean.

 

Naked eyes that didn't possess an ego, it seemed like no

 transitory biological reaction paid a visit.

 

One curious aspect about her eyes

 was that despite their ghostly paleness,

 they seemed cavernously deep,

never to attend the never-ending séance.

 

Her eyes were attractive but one couldn't

 easily put a finger on why.

She wasn't wearing make-up,

 but her eyes had such quiet power

that the rest of her face and body

seemed as an accessory,

in a sense her eyes "wore" her.

 

Reviews

[SquinklaPsyOps]

It was very heartwarming.

Very compelling and interesting piece, well written with a strong, clear voice.

It is easy to read, the facts are presented clearly and concisely.

Congratulations and thank you for sharing interesting story.

[Frontier]

Thanks Squinkla, thank you for stoppping by

[Ibreez Shabkhez]

You write a little like my brother... no impurity of feeling there. I have a habit of slipping into cynicism and self contradiction.

[Frontier]

Yes in this case, I couldn't be cynical or contradictory about the subject, someone's eyes....
Not all my writing is so direct also. Thanks.

[David Scott]

And we must look back...
These eyes capture us in this way, if even for a moment.
Like some of our poetry and our stories. They use us as decorations hanging from there pages by the thread of ink...
I loved the picture your words painted.

[Frontier]

Thanks David, indeed!

[Kayleen]

Somehow "Cathedral Eyes" just struck me. the combination and effect of words just fascinates me and when I see a unique and striking phrase I have to to say well done. Theres beauty in something as simple as the way two words can pair and youve found it. overall a Haunting Picture and lovely gorgeously descriptive piece, good job!

[Frontier]

Thanks, yes I think thats my favorite part of the entire piece, what caused me to write in the first place :) thanks

[Eagle Cruagh]

Exquisite character sketch.
I am afraid the eyes have seen too much.
The face has hardened and become pale as
she looks out upon a world of little understanding.
This sketch is beautifully written. The author must
be a lady of great depth and ability.
---- Eagle Cruagh

[Frontier]

Thanks :) I guess the price of knowing the truth is seeing too much.

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful photo and very good description. I love to look into a woman's eyes. You can see forever if she allowed. Thank you for sharing the outstanding story.
Coyote

[~]

"her eyes "wore" her" that is a phenomenal line and idea. Really liked the way you spun this story and described the way these piercing eyes had such a profound way of capturing all attention.

[Frontier]

Yes thanks, I've noticed only certain special people possess this feature, of their eyes wearing them. Glad you stopped by. :)

[captain]

It was definitely intriguing. The way you describe the lady, you’ve puts mysteriousness that seemingly haunting like a ghost of the outer world. It’s a fascinating short story.

[Frontier]

Thanks Im glad you like!

[CatT]

This is lovely. I do find pale eyes to be very enchanting, in a way, so I love what you're saying. Beautiful!

[Sibusiso Xtdo Gama]

i love how from just reading the story you could sense some peotic scent....this is a very good write..Bravo.

[Frontier]

thank you Sibusio :)