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This was during a dark phase...

Frustrated steps towards an unseen monolith. 

Where are you going? 

I'm following lost steps from lost days. 

I know I'm undeniable but I deny myself every day

You've set my vision on an orbit. 

 

How afraid I am of paradise. 

How constrained my mind causes me to be! 

Holy organs, show your true powers! Stop going around in circles. 

Such a picky mind, restless, it cannot find sanctuary within the three dimensionality. 

 

Condensed eyes and faces; relentless spotless functionality...streamlined they travel. 

 

Mind, I want to dethrone you. I'll be better off without you. 

Will you stop placing shackles on my body? 

Will you quit stifling my nervous system? Will you stop playing cruel jokes on me? 

Will you stop tormenting my conscience and making a travesty out of my body? 

 

You are selfish and love to be in the safe-zone. 

Brain, you need to change. 

Stop hiding, for you are truly beautiful. 

 

Why did you turn my body into a wet towel? 

Into a physiological curiosity? 

 

Mind, you are a dictator.

When I believe I'm free at last is when I most feel your cold-blooded reminder.

Your shapeless, frozen grasp digging into my sacred regions, mercilessly cackling at your destruction of precious life-dreams. 

Author's Note

Whenever I come back and read this it still manages to surprise me by its darkness.

Reviews

[just Penny]

I love this in it's entirety ! A deep, dark poem where emotional harm is laid bare and picked apart piece by piece. Your imagery is stunning, from "set my vision on an orbit" to "holy organs" and "digging into my sacred regions". You have a great talent for dark writing ! Penny

[Frontier]

Oh thanks so much! I really appreciate your descriptive review. :)

[aditya gawade]

itz a really good poem
U have managed to capture and analyze the internal struggle between the mind and soul quite nicely.
U have a very unique line of thought .
Great Job :)
Keep writing :)

[Frontier]

thanks for the encouragement, Aditya.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

mind over matter...mind over heart...staying safe...we want to break free, love again with just our heart...but no...the dictator of a mind says no...no more hurt, no more pain...
but i say, no pain no gain...
we can't let the past destroy our precious dreams.

yet, living by my own rule? i seldom can.

this is a dark piece filled with struggle, the struggle to let go of the past, and move forward.

[Frontier]

Thanks again Jacob. I'm enjoying these thorough, insightful reviews.

[MoriartyMesa]

This was a very nice belend of mental ideal and what could be. I liked this and hope to see more.