Shades of our Love ..

Pink roses you used 

to give to me, stopped coming. 

soon our love faded 

Reviews

[Carl Drake Barnard]

psssst,this is a haiku,I love the colours Grait imagination work there,I really think you should use coma's it slows the reader giving time to think,the speed of this lets me feel like ''running in a wall''

[Earthy Mumma Soul]

im so dyslexic so help me then , where would you put the commas ? and I hear you ... from what you said about "running in a wall"

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Pink roses, you used to give to me,stopped coming.... Fading our love try this :)

[Earthy Mumma Soul]

I changed it my way see ;) you do have a point though so thanks x

[Carl Drake Barnard]

lol my end part is wrong it can be:fading all our love,faded all our love,soon fading all our love... Ect Think hard about it and read out to yourself :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Those roses can be storytellers. Nice use of the rose leading to a sad ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Earthy Mumma Soul]

yes.... they started pink and red then purple and white and for some reason I didn't like that .... I had real aversion for some reason lol

[writer max ride]

Lol it was a great read!! I hope we can be friend's on here!!! :0