The Dark

The Dark

A Story by Claudia-Rae
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A monologue/freewrite I did in my Creative Writing Class that I really enjoyed reading to the class and looking at their confused faces.

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So I'm in the dark, big deal. There are lots of fun things to do in the dark! Do you think you're so great, just because you're in the light? You're probably squinting so hard your face looks smooshed. But my pupils are dialated and I can see too. I can see just how unhappy you are, surrounded by your mistakes. They're thrown into sharp relief all around you. You can't ignore them, they even have shadows. Double of everything you ever fucked up, just like yourself.

I can hide, here in the dark, but I'm not hidding. You can find me anytime you want, but you won't. You're scared even though there is no darkness around you. Everything you said and did is known, and you can't hide from it any longher. We know who you are, you're the person in the light. You thought you were so pure and righteous, but you're a fake who can't make a decision and stick with it.

That's why I'm happy in the dark. I wasn't going to sit idly by, hoping. I came into the dark myself, and I'm happpy, because I wasn't put here by you.

© 2009 Claudia-Rae


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I enjoyed this write. It explains how I feel most days. As if I'm in the dark and I have to watch everyone else living their lives in the light. Where everything is so precise and clear that you can read the Light Dwellers lives like a book and almost predict what their going to do next. And honestly, they always do appear to be afraid, and hiding behind a fake facade.
While reading you piece, to me, it seemed as if you where trying to portray the people in the light as the 'populars' and the people in the dark as the 'misfits'. If so I'd choose to be a misfit any day!

This piece had a few mistakes in it but nothing that can't be easily fixed. This piece was a great read!! Can't wait to read more!!!

Peace,
NightsShade

Posted 15 Years Ago


Hi and welcome to the Cafe. This was an awesome read! Might I suggest thou that you label it under "Poetry" instead of a story? It has a beautiful poetic flow to it all the while conveying the feelings of the writer. I loved it.

Posted 15 Years Ago



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