Blue Sky (sestina

I'm still working on it !!!!!:)

The morning sun warms the sky

As blue birds sing to heavens high.

 They sing of hope, laced with love

and gaze upon the rising sun.

 Evening moves our minds retrace

as a tender longing,helps us wake.

 

 

Perfect smile, helps me wake

As I gaze at the morning sky.

Words you spell and retrace

K-i-s-s-m-e sends my spirit high.

 Cheeks blush, as the sherbet sun

and my heart beats with love.

 

Lonesome dove croons of love

as an eastern wind softly wakes.

A red-tail hawk spheres the sun.

Making idle shapes in the sky

tiny zephyr whips a petal high

and its path I cannot retrace.

 

Lover, so true I shall retrace

Each moment of our love.

 No thought to the sky so high

as your desires wild, I will wake.

Until you blush as the morning sky

and our passion out shines the sun.

 

Soft hue of day, flash hot the sun.

As acorn trail a squirrel  retrace

He checks for danger in the sky.

A fine spring morning lurks of love

As 2^nd squirrel is now a wake.

Dance and tease on limbs up high.

 

From his perch he climbs up high

and with audacity greets the sun.

Disturbing clouds cross his wake

for fun his path he will retrace.

Blue bird Casanova looks for love

in the valley and into the azure sky.

 

Gentle embrace, I wake most high

see into sky so blue, fair as the sun.

retrace hands so smooth, that I love.

 

 

Author's Note

A sestina: 6 sestets (6 line stanzas) usually unrhymed but not necessarily, and a final tercet. Traditionally on keeps the same line length. The words at the end of each line in the first stanza are repeated in the following fashion for the subsequent 5 stanzas. 1) 123456 2) 615243 3) 364125 and one at the end in this order (..6...2) (..1..4) (..5..3)
4) 532614 5) 451362 6) 246531

Reviews

[OT]

firstly - bravo for attempting a sestina!! definitely one of the more complicated forms and one that takes such skill and effort! you picked the end words so cleverly that they all fit naturally throughout - more intriguing is the words you've used within the lines to give added effect to the end word - like "sky so high" - it gives them a fresh feeling when they come around again!! brilliant go at one!! nice!

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WOW CHERRIE!!
This is simply amazing,
I really like this write, it is so beautiful.

[Gomer LePoet]

holy wow. That is, I know I'm a guy, but, beautiful. Eloquently written with a gentle rhythm. very picturesque. there's something about the ladies from Oklahoma. Hmmm! is it in the water? lol great write, thanks for sharing this.