Wow! You paint a wonderful picture of a 'fine springs day', Your imagery in the piece is different gravy [ English saying meaning different class!!! ], and the rhyme and flow got better and better. Very impressive work. Loved reading your profile too, you seem a really nice lady and surely lying about your age!!!! How about try 36?!!!!!
Take care, Chris.
Ahhhhhh..sigh...Love me an Oklahoma Spring day...so beautiful and such is this poem. Cherrie your discriptions were spot on girl, made for the perfect and most vivd images. Im so enjoying this weather we are having, but not looking forward to the twisters..Wonderful piece
Wow! You paint a wonderful picture of a 'fine springs day', Your imagery in the piece is different gravy [ English saying meaning different class!!! ], and the rhyme and flow got better and better. Very impressive work. Loved reading your profile too, you seem a really nice lady and surely lying about your age!!!! How about try 36?!!!!!
Take care, Chris.
Cherrie,
this isn't good poetry....It's Great poetry...My Goodness..it's as if i was there toting the bale and sowing the field. I'm not trying to be cute, but I felt like I was in a "Lassie" rerun...I could picture every line in my mind and saw what you must see everyday
Graphically beautiful and vivid images. Seriously, a wonderful write.
allen
One critique and I'm 95% sure...maybe someone else can confirm...
"lay's" i think should be lies (or even lain or laid)...if lay IS correct than it should be lays...but I think it's lies...whew!
I'd gladly suffer a few saddle sores to experience a ride like that. You've made me really want to get out of this house. A terrific, soothing write, Cherrie.
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