Rage

have you ever smiled at someone who did not smile back

Rage burned up my entire being as she smiled at me, looking into my eyes invading my very soul. What gave her the right to look upon my face and give me hope where there is none?  No one sees me and I like it that way.

I worked extra hard to erase humanity from my day, my life, my face, and with one single smile I can feel tears of hope springing forth.  My first instinct was to rip her lips off but her smile is so warm all I want is a hug.

Oh yeah pass me by my first instinct was right!

Author's Note

I'm sitting in the dark making crap up :) so bear with me

Reviews

[roarke]

sit in the dark and try to turn off all the electronic noise, even the hum of transformers.... you'll be surprised again at the inspirations you transcribe.

the slow burn disguising the seething, raging caldera waiting beneath. btw, don't forget to use vice grip pliers when ripping the lips off... fyi....lol.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Smiles are but decorations upon fleshly canvas, behind which can, often, lurk turmoil that boils in tsunami-like waves of agonizing pain inflicted by the mere living of this life rife with circumstance and happenstance of events and incidents whereupon some thing or some one has set flame to the kindling of our inner suffering that no one sees--because we dress ourselves in the facade of a smile ... Those who do not smile back, rest assured, have been wounded by a someone who wore the facade of a smile for their own deceitful reasons of gaining trust to soon be betrayed in clear cut revelation of subtle motives brought to light ... Some folks are perfectly happy without the facade of a smile decorating their pie holes ... I, for one, am not trusting of folks who smile too easily or readily, and that with not knowing the reasons of why they should smile at such as I without there being something that they want ... Nicely done ... A visit to the dark side of reality is to unveil the humane facade of humanity, for we humans are much more animal than humane ...

[Cherrie Palmer]

I fall on the other side of this, and by nature almost always smile at those I come into eye contact with. However the writer in me always wonders why some do not smile back:)

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn's Dark Tales & More Store]

Smiling is consider common courtesy and a sign of friendliness ... We are taught this as reality, when, sometimes, nothing could be further from the truth ... LOL! ... To some, showing themselves friendly is a proven sign of vulnerability and weakness that life, and its distasteful experiences, has taught them not to exhibit openly or freely ... I smile when someone pisses me off ... I find myself frowning when perfectly happy ... Of course, I am an odd duck from Texas ...

[Cherrie Palmer]

it's that Red River you shouldn't swim in it

[Cherrie Palmer]

fowls up the thought process :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I wouldn't call it crap...its quiet good. Keep writin :)

[eatmills]

Truly sounds that a victim was spared by a deranged serial killer's evil thoughts. I agree with the other review this could be expanded or be used for a story.

[madmocha]

The warmth of the smile cracks your stone cold exterior... crumbling the defensive shell you had built around you. Suddenly the light of hope invades your self-imposed darkness, and you want... no, you need more. The hope needs air to breath, and nourishment to grow. You inwardly reach toward to giver of the hope... but they walk on by.

Wow! Cherrie, the unbounded variety and insight of your writing continues
to amaze me. As always concise, and to the point. It's just that your points are so... 'barbed'. ;)

BTW, this, Cherrie, most definitely is NOT crap.

[TJ]

Eccentric and sadistic! How demented to want to hurt someone for giving you a kind look. You got into the tormented mind of the serial killer well. Creeeeeepy. Remind me to keep my eyes to the ground from now on :)

[Ladysue]

yes, I have. smiles are usually contagious and for one not to smile back, makes you wonder...nicely done...

[An owl on the moon]

There was such a playful anger that flowed through here. That game of glimpse and glance, wondering and more. So well done, and in the dark nonetheless!

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Yes ... is the simple answer; my nature is to smile as I meet and greet! But if not reciprocated; confronted with cynical implications arising from this dismissal - I too have subliminal enraged emotions.

Not C**p at all ... you’re onto something here, which needs exploring and expanding! Therefore, I look forward to the second edition of your thoughts.

Phillip