The Test Of A Rose

Silky smooth droplets float to the earth below

A crimson shower begins to flow

Petals fall so gently down

as whispered wishes drift heavenward bound

Starry night and loves sweet wish

Blend together in hopes of a kiss

A petal yes

And a petal no

The last one falls

As I whisper

He loves me more!

Reviews

[roarke]

the first two lines are such rich, visually vibrant metaphors. Roses are soft and fragrant, yet so vividly sharp and striking at the same time.

the last line, I take possibly a different way than most, it hints ever so subtle at a passion, maybe an ego, accented with an exclamation mark...
perhaps an under current of envy? OR after the last petal falls, it's understood the love is still there even though the flower is no more...Just my takes. Beautiful lines Cherrie

[White Ink]

This is so amazing!! very beautiful :)

[White Ink]

Beautiful!

[YQ]

This poem enchants me. I can tell you have a very sophisticated style of writing. Everything from the imagery to the the wording is flawless. It leaves one with a clear image in their mind of what you've described. Again beautifully done.

[Samuel Dickens]

Elegant writing and a happy ending! Nice, romantic one, Cherrie.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Soft, sweet, and very romantic... those last thee lines are the perfect ending.

[OT]

a very positive and ethereal one almost - the petals falling - the heavenbound showers - great light imagery to tease the mind!! nice!

[Ladysue]

Beautiful and heartwarming...vivid imagery...soft flow...A romantic and I agree the mood is fantastic...good work...

[Tate Morgan]

MMMMMM i like this it meanders beautifully as the petals fall

[Ron]

I can smell sweet rose fragrance as I read the words. Tender words that bim with love particularly the need to be loved. Quality, quality work I feel CP is in the mood to astound! Oscar Wilde would have sent this to Bosey!