Chilled Wine Warm Kiss

Chaiku

 

One glass red wine,

your eyes divine,

two words one match,

warm fire slow dance,

soft jazz  transmits,

relive first glance,

moonlit  picnic,

your hand  in mine

starlit skyline,

our hearts keeptime,

chilled wine warm kiss,

our love  true bliss.

Author's Note

any comments are helpful

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

never heard of chaiku ... i like the meter your poem takes .. the mix of iambic and trochaic arrangements works .. it presents a very specific rhythm when i read it ..especially out loud ...love the title and theme ..very romantic ... simple, the way it should be. :)
E.

[Cherrie Palmer]

by nature I prefer free verse, but I really liked the way the images told a story.
thank you, for the review.

[Ovi-Odiete]

This is beautiful and sweet to read. Congratulations, your poem Chilled wine warm kiss has come 3rd place EXPERT in my poetry contest LOVE. Thanks for your beautiful submission

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow prefect timing at a show pace let's us savor true romance which always ends with a warm kiss. Thank you for sharing.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Mauricio
I am so happy you liked the flow of this one. It is one of my favorites.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Hey visual communication, I like something that makes you see as you read. Thank you.

[William Michael Reeves]

Now I'm reading the reviews. Is that a thing? Chaiku?

[Cherrie Palmer]

I know sounds like I should say God bless you and cover you nose. :)

[William Michael Reeves]

How far back in time am I? I like the 4, 4 thing. I'd use a musical term to describe it. Staccato. The sharp consonants add to it.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you metered writings are not my fortaie. But this arrangement just sorta wrote itself.

[Neville]

I raise my Chianti to your chaiku which goes down fine with or without wine......Never knowingly written one of these, looks far too complicated. I applaud ya.................Neville

[Cherrie Palmer]

thank you Neville, but because i worked in images only it came together with ease.

[Neville]

I tried that but ended up with something so surreal Dali would have done his nut.....

[Cherrie Palmer]

you would do great

[Neville]

We'll see but dont hold ya breath.........

[Cherrie Palmer]

.....okay :)

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Dear Cherrie!
It's only Richard, paying a visit to tell you what I think is a most lovely, fetching, sigh-worthy piece of poetical romance. Your creative heart and tender notions truly caress my senses.
It's been a long while since my olde pen scribed a Chaiku, but you've inspired me anew (see Mockingbird).
I have never came close to anything as wonderful as yours is in flow, imagery, nuance, timbre, or bliss-filled moment.
Though, the quatrain verses are normally spaced apart, yours work well in ease of rhythm and flow … and, Cherrie, I really do love this sweet little warmer. : )

Happy hugs 'n warmest thanks for sharing You, Dear Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard

[Cherrie Palmer]

I have not created many of these but they lend to a most graceful flow and I look forward to reading yours

[Richard🖌]

Me, too, Cherrie … I'll like that very much. : )
Have you any more Chaiku posted here?