Dazzling Luminaries

Ascending sun gives birth to wind.

That gentle breeze upon my skin.

Asks me softly to rise from sleep.

Fizzling stars hold their space,

As a waking sun take their place.

The cadence of day parades by fast.

Soon the sun lays low to rest.

The budding night a bloom of black.

Sets the scene for us to relax.

The waltzing moon begins his dance.

As dazzling luminaries shine overhead.

Reviews

[D. Mansfield]

Amazing things both sunrise and sunsets.taken for granted by most, nice poem

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Very romantic depiction of sunrise and sunset set in a whimsical/quaint gentle piece of poetry.

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Cherrie... from sunrise to sunset.. there is a Vignette that brings a path of Honeysuckle Sips of sweet amour. truly, pat

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

I love the whole coupling within the sunlit and the moonlight,
very romantic, great write! ----Maynard

[Cherrie]

Thank you Maynard 😊

[1809 Black Plague December]

most Welcome Dear, :S

[Ken Simm.]

Stars but this is good. Descriptive, visual ,subtle and oh so gently worded. I love it.

[Cherrie]

Thank you Ken 😊

[Lorry]

It wasn't that long ago that I was wishing for a nice, cooling breeze to cool us down from the near tropical mid twenty degrees (Well, it is in Scotland anyway), but fast forward to now and it feels like someone hit the wrong setting on the air con and we'll, we're never really done moaning about the weather here, are we?
But this piece sounds about right to me. Not too much, not too little, just right... I think Goldilocks said.
And she was right! A day drama free, that just plays itself out without scream or silence.
You know, I'm gonna have to read up what else Goldilocks said. The girl was onto something! 😊

[NormaZ]

Very nice, love the imagery, and to me it feels like the slow turning of the earth, graceful.

[Cherrie]

Thank you Norma 🙂

[Ken e Bujold]

A craftsman (woman's) poem Cherrie. Very much enjoyed the use of slants, which keep true to theme without forcing rhyme. As well breaking away from meter in your final line is a clever touch to suggest the rambling way of universe.

ken

[Cherrie]

Thank you Ken
I like these poems to hold smooth audible quality. To me that is key to me enjoying the end product. Sometimes I use a heavy rhyme but I prefer a smooth slant.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I like that you chose near rhyme, or slant rhyme it is also called, and kept the structure intact.
The poem reads well.

Winston

[Cherrie]

I like a slant rhyme and breaking away from the cadence on the last line. Thank you 😊 so much for reading and reviewing.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I agree about the break in rhythm of last line. Poems need some kind of tension to keep them from sounding like a nursery rhyme-slant and breaks in rhythm do that job.

Winston

[William Propsner]

Well written.
Visible thoughts

[Cherrie]

Thank you William

[William Propsner]

You are quite welcome. The words you used brought peaceful thoughts of days gone by.
Thank you