The Curtain of Night

Villanelle 19 lines Aba, ab1, ab3, ab1, ab3, ab13

"Shall we begin?" asks the Sun.
Casting his light for the Sky to see.
But the curtain of Night still hung.

While fading stars grew sullen.
toward the horizon, the light was carried.
"Shall we begin?" asks the Sun.

I have the Night on the run.
The wafting breeze has found its qi.
But the curtain of Night still hung.

Coy was the wind as to the mist it clung.
Waltzing across both land and sea.
"Shall we begin?" asks the Sun.

Who grew impatient and wanted fun,
and so, he rose, shining over the lea.
But the curtain of Night still hung.

As Night's morning vespers were spun,
thinning to a milky tea.
"Shall we begin?" asks the Sun.
But the curtain of Night still hung.

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

I love the repetition in this poem; it makes an important statement about those behind the curtain....what is going on ...are there dark secrets? I feel for the sun ,which you portray almost as a person trying to awaken someone who wants to sleep...or is there death behind the curtain?...leaves the reader thinking ...and that's great!!!!
Best, B

[Cherrie Palmer]

Betty I hate that I missed your review. Sometimes I don't see (or get) the notifications. I really like trying my hand at this form and so pleased you took time review it. Thank you so very much.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome my friend!
Lovely...
Warmly, B

[Cherrie Palmer]

These poems are so fun to write. I feel like your style of writing ✍ would create an amazing vinanelle ( which sounds likesome sort of cigar)
:)

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Beautiful Cherrie 😊 I think my favourite of yours x

I don’t know all the poetic terms as I’m not trained in poetry but love the style and how the sun repeats the question amazing write ✍️ I say !

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Julie. To me this is a wonderful format to start with. I'm a fan of this style. Even though I lean toward free verse.

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Cherrie... this is my newly found favorite.
Our Weather has been exactly like you have penned this Poem.
We have had many days of Rain after a long drought. However, on a number of days ...
the Sun did burst forth with warmth that gave us energy. I planted many garden
plants and they have bloomed like Dancers in a Broadway Play. Thanks for giving
my feelings a place to prop up on an over-stuffed Sofa and hum along with your Symphony.
Be blessed and keep Cool. gently, Pat

[Cherrie Palmer]

I'm glad to hear you all were blessed with some rain.
:) happy Monday.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Cherry … and now on Mo day Morning the Sun has Tisen and th Burds are singing … God Bless America… Let Freedim Run on Memoeial Day… Amen… Pat

[red93]

A Great Villanelle is hard to achieve Cherrie. One thinks of Dylan Thomas of course, and Empson, and Auden. I think you nailed it pretty good ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Cherrie Palmer]

I enjoy writing these poems. I try to pick my two lines of repetition well. One line to propel the piece and hopefully one ti fortify the image. I think this format is a win-win for every writer to try. I also like writing a second poem to further the story.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

What a wonderful penned poem. I love it.

[Cherrie Palmer]

thank you 😊

[Chris Shaw]

Beautiful piece Cherrie. The villanelle is such a lovely form. Wonderful imagery here in the fight between the sun and night. Very well penned poet. Have a great Friday.

Chris

[AYVID N]

I love Villanelles and this was so beautiful to read. There is a tussle between the night and the sun and the night wants to hold on tight till can, not wanting to fade into the sunlight. I loved the poem concept and the lovely effect created by the imagery you used here. Thank you for sharing. Loved it!

[Cherrie Palmer]

I love writing these also. They always give you a big bang for your buck.
& thank you for such a sweet review.

[AYVID N]

You're most welcome dear Cherrie. 🙋‍♀️💕

[Lisasview]

I really did so enjoy this an I loved the meter... Worked so well with your words..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Lisa 😊

[Lisasview]

Just reread your poem which I reviewed a year ago... Now reading it I think it would be an amazing poem for children...With wonderful illustrations...
Lisa

[Soyam]

That's sounds so good!!!
And specially "shall we begin" asks the sun.
That too good ;))
Keep penning ma'am.