Water's Edge

31 syllables 5 7 5 7 7

cool moss kiss my feet
guided by moonbeams I go
a mirrored lake waits
as I watch it ever low
soon it is swallowed whole

Reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

I picture the magic of reflections in water as l move toward it, until it disappears entirely. Nice and contrite, nice.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you 😊
I like that as well. WheneverIt seems like the image is lost in the water.

[Robert Haigh]

The beauty and magic of moonlight. Yet there is a feeling of melancholy here. Planet Earth being used and abused by mankind comes to mind.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Robert 😊

[keith]

i apologize for the span of time since this piece written and when i took opportunity to read.
the title grabbed me as this is the same as a weekly newsprint contributor i was way back in the mid to late 80s.
but this is not about me ... i am drawn to the one particular sentence 'guided by moonbeams I go'
it reminds me of the times i spent on the waters of the sound checking and resetting my flounder nets in the fall of the years spent on the of pamlico sound of the outer banks, north carolina.
it captures the essence of time spent upon the water mattering not lake or sound
water is indeed water of movement ebb and flow ... a very honest write
thank you

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you 😊 I love water at night. It's relaxing and filled with tranquility.

[Ranger Kessel]

I can feel the emotion of loss. Very nicely done

[Cherrie Palmer]

Ya know I never thought about with that emotion in mind. Your review is exactly what I love about readers leaving comments. It widens my perspective.
:) thank you Ranger

[Ranger Kessel]

Youre welcome

[lightsong]

Ah! Dear Cherrie ✨ when You write of nature, You bring it to LIFE! this is vibrant, full of life... I don't know how in few lines You can create such ethereal beauty and a whole world as I've said, but You do, and magically so....

[Cherrie Palmer]

You are always so gracious. Thank you Light

[lightsong]

You are so welcome 💞

[red93]

Ooh I like this a lot Cherrie - a nice descriptive Tanka full of positivity and grace. Excellent.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Tony. I hope this Sunday is going well for you my friend.

[red93]

Much better today thanks Cherrie - touch wood.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Cherrie... the best part of our yard is th green moss that is under the front Windows of our older house. No weeds gather and the Color is emerald green. It is magical. We have a sunken area close to the Moss where a Pond appears when it Rains a lot... but disappears when the Sun comes out. We have no lower level or basement so the Earth is free to breathe. I can see the Beauty in your Poem. tenderly, Pat

[Cherrie Palmer]

Us too we get a rain filled pond with a down pour also. Both kids and dogs love it.

[Patricia Wedel]

I like to think that Birds could Bathe and Sip the Rain Water. ❤️ Lovely to share these thoughts. tenderly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there is a sadness here...so many lakes are going down because of global warming...
soon everything might become just a desert...I hope we have plenty of water to drink.
this is so good.
j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Good morning Jacob:) yes it's scary when you see different places going dry. While down our way Bull Shoals is 28 feet over.

[Chris Shaw]

Love that first line in this tanka Cherrie. Yes, walking on moss, so soft. I saw the lake in the light of the moon and then when the moon disappeared behind cloud, the lake was gone. Nice imagery.

[Cherrie Palmer]

That should be its own poem once the moon is gone and textures of black fill the night.

[Chris Shaw]

There's a thought :)

[William Michael Reeves]

Couldn't help but think about lakes that have been in the news lately. Drying up. Some reveal horrors and others reveal beauty.

You didn't call it a Tanka?

[Cherrie Palmer]

No, I didn't, but it is :) I figured the big kids could figure it out. :)the lake we live by is 28 feet above average. No lack of water here.