Caress of Hand

Turning the corner
today
I bumped into you
a brick wall
that took my breath away
I prepared not for you this day
frozen in step I did not move
no words
came to me
as I looked at you
merci
you offered me
as you passed me by
with only
a caress
of the hand

Reviews

[duff]

I like this because it can take you in different directions. Something so uplifting but maybe something sinister and watching you. A most enjoyable read. Nice job.

[Cherrie]

I'm glad you liked this just popped in my head.

[Cherrie]

And yes I can see how this could go more than one way.

[Donna]

I really like this poem. A touch can be so powerful. Great poem!

[Cherrie]

Good morning and thank you Donna 😊

[William Michael Reeves]

I don't know why but the first thing that came to mind was...did you have your face buried in your phone? Walking along, reading our poetry, not a care till you hit your head there, on the wall. That was me! Merci! (I'm going to resist the urge coming over me to rewrite this all!)

[Cherrie]

A chance encounter is a great subject. It can be anyone with any emotional tie you choose.

[William Michael Reeves]

I just wrote this down in my book. You know what that means!

[William Michael Reeves]

It means...

My hand turned
The wall you hit
Yesterday
Into a door
That leads the way
To me
Held open
With a gaze
That thawed your thought
Unlocked your legs
And with a step
I heard you whisper
"de rien"
As you passed
Your breath caressed
The warmth of words
Held in surprise
We met
In the corner of our eyes.

[William Michael Reeves]

Second to last line wants to be, when we met.

[Cherrie]

Last line over the top good.

[Patricia]

Oh wow what a powerful little write! Yep know the feeling ;) excellent!

[Cherrie]

:) thank you so much the little scene popped in my head and I wanted to let it play like a mini movie.

[M. J. Smith]

Must have been some character. Does the word breathtaking apply? One of those people who occupy space like a force of nature. I've known a few. Well written.

[Cherrie]

:) thank you I wanted itvto move like a little movie. I'm so pleased you liked it.

[Lisasview]

I do not know why but your few words made me cry.. I suppose because I have been there and although many many years ago, the thought of how I felt then is still with me..and probably will be forever.
The mere fact that your words have the power to evoke such emotion is truly a wonderful gift..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Cherrie]

Sometimes what we read sneaks up on our past emotions. I'm always surprised when it happens. Thank you for such a heartfelt review.

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome.

[Ken Simm.]

Tactile and intelligent romance. Excellent piece with superb structure.

[Cherrie]

Thank you :) I wanted the breaks to drive the story.

[knighngale]

oh wow, touch is everything. Does he like me? He hugged me but it didn't mean anything? LOL great read honey :D

[Cherrie]

Good morning and thank you 😊

[knighngale]

your most welcome dear :D

[Gee]

Have felt this a few times in my long ago past, usually when the lady was taken by a friend! The butterflies in the stomach stir but are forever trapped.
Good morning Cherrie, Hope you are well.

[Cherrie]

Good morning:)
I hope your day is going great.
Yes in our younger days I think there is that one person that ties us in knots 🪢
Thank you for the visit.

[Gee]

My pleasure

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes friends is not what we want....keep the hand, give me your heart.

I like the thought process shown in this piece.

j.

[Cherrie]

Good morning Jacob. Most of the time a idea hits me and -bam! - I'm off to the races.