You I Know

Got the idea from one of Bill's comments

Your lifted palm, says help.
Your crooked smile, says sure.
That protruding chin, says stop.
While twinkling eyes, say more.

My name you say and I arise.
"Dance with me," I coo.

As we let the stars hypnotize.
We mingle our love with time.

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Some say familiarity breeds contempt. I say it breeds comfort and security. We need to easily relate to others to become "familiar". I'm not saying there are no borders or personal parameters it would be insensitive and foolish to breach; just that love grows better with time.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I agree with you.

[Throwing Romeo]

Poetry is as close as we can be
to language.
As gestures are to love.

Lovely touches imbued in this.
Looking forward to reading more.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you :)I look forward to returning the visit.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Near rhyme, nearly rejected, but the smile cedes the feelings within.
Lovely, short piece, Cherrie.
j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

:) Thank you Jacob. Short and sweet that's motto.

[JE Falcon]

I really liked the visuals, but my heart asked for more lines to be there; not many, just more.

[Cherrie Palmer]

If I can turn the corner on this
I may due a 2nd stanza leading with words with actions to follow

[JE Falcon]

I'll be waiting, have a great day.

[William Michael Reeves]

Helped by a palm lifted
The smile sure spoke crooked
Stopping above a chin perturding
Speaking eyes that say twinkling

( I went with perturding but can't help but think you meant protruding?)

[Cherrie Palmer]

Yes have to fix that auto correct is to helpful.
5his is what happens when I type on my phone:)

[William Michael Reeves]

Same here! Autocorrect works really hard to make us sound foolish. And I swear when I'm on this site it goes into overdrive changing words that were just fine.

[William Michael Reeves]

Something happened to my first review of this. I had asked if it was inspired by the question answer thing and the twinkling light through the leaves of the willow. Gladdens me to know I inspired you!

[Cherrie Palmer]

It was the conversation we had about: seeing you

[William Michael Reeves]

Ah! Yes! And the honesty required by both to know each other so well. But maybe not so rare, as people might not know where that inside them dwells.

[Unspoken poet]

This is wonderful Cherrie, enjoyable read.

[Cherrie Palmer]

:) thank you
I think it would be fun to see how others would duplicate this notion.

[Unspoken poet]

well i don't know who Bill is so, I can't tell, I did enjoy this.

[Cherrie Palmer]

William Michael Reeves (our fellow poet here in the cafe) made me think of this idea. But everyone knows at least one person they can know this well.

[Einstein Noodle]

this is very intriguing to me ma'am! the perspective is more of a man to a woman ... lvoe play is such a world of dichotomous tugs of war eh!? ... i really like your tight verse my friend .. creating many scenes and scenarios in me nog ... really like the trip! thanks for sharing mon Cherrie! ;) ........
E.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I think as time goes by we may know our partner better than we know ourselves.
I wanted to set the flow a keep it simple.

[Einstein Noodle]

i think you are right .. we tend to mask our weaknesses and flaws .. time will assuredly wear those walls down ... it's the beauty of commitment ...there are fruits in vulnerability .. it's twinkling eyes that will always bewitch me ;)

[M. J. Smith]

Isn't it interesting how our loved ones communicate without words? There is a whole unspoken vocabulary that is unique to each person. Well written, Cherrie.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Yes it's true a secret language made up of time.