Chi of Life

Maybe

May I draw nearer? My soul cries to know. 

Know our love is anointed with each tear. 

Tears straight from Heaven's reserved overflow . 

Overflowing my heart leaving it bare. 

 Bare your spirit to me I beg and plea. 

Pleas I fear are lost. Can you bend to want? 

Want and need, lover of my youth, my chi. 

Chi of life my very breath that I hunt. 

 Hunter of time yield a single moment. 

Moments that I shall cherish for always. 

Always that is dancing just out in front. 

Front and center I stand with heart ablaze. 

Shall I speak distinctly, making it clear? 

Clearer to you. Say I. I need you near.

Reviews

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

The yearning and need for love which consumes and becomes in essence a part of you. That energy and breath needed to exists. And to be loved the same in return. A powerful aspirational poem on true love. Very nicely written Cherrie and very emotive.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Well I wanted to take a stab at a sonnet. :) thank you Carlos for the encouraging review.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

oh I hear you there Cherrie. I have made some attempts at writing sonnets but I keep falling short on there requirements and rules. They are a struggle for me. Eventually I'll get one written correctly though it being coherent may be another thing altogether. But even in my failure can come some good art. This poem of yours made me feel the words and that is a powerful thing unto itself that art should always strive for. Wonderful work, dear poet.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I agree. I cannot always set the cadence to pace. I think for me the problem with writing an iambic pentameter is I try for my words to blend. But like you I am happy with the outcome.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

That is me exact issue as well. I absolutely hate iambic pentameter I find it constricting because my style of writing is very wordy and effusive. Someday I'll dedicate some time to get one that finally meets those parameters, but I feel even in failure beautiful art is created. Thank you for sharing your art with us Cherrie.

[Kerra]

Wow, this is very good even though i don't know what Chi is, Love this write

[Cherrie Palmer]

Means breath and thank you :)

[Kerra]

ah, thank you. hope you have a wonderful rest of your day.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you. You too:)