Chi of Life

Maybe

May I draw nearer? My soul cries to know. 

Know our love is anointed with each tear. 

Tears straight from Heaven's reserved overflow . 

Overflowing my heart leaving it bare. 

 Bare your spirit to me I beg and plea. 

Pleas I fear are lost. Can you bend to want? 

Want and need, lover of my youth, my chi. 

Chi of life my very breath that I hunt. 

 Hunter of time yield a single moment. 

Moments that I shall cherish for always. 

Always that is dancing just out in front. 

Front and center I stand with heart ablaze. 

Shall I speak distinctly, making it clear? 

Clearer to you. Say I. I need you near.

Reviews

[M. J. Smith]

Which pocket did you leave this one in? 😄
All jokes aside, he probably read this one over several times when nobody was looking.
A beautiful poem, Miss Cherrie.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I have hidden poems in his wallet before. Once he complained he never had money. So I stuffed his wallet with monopoly money 💰

[M. J. Smith]

Did anyone ever tell you you have an evil sense if humor? 😆
Do I even want to know what kind of gags were pulled on you by your family? LOL! : ))

[Cherrie Palmer]

Lol
As a kid we renamed my grandpas beagle, Get.
Because he was always yelling at the puppy to get down get off me...
So me and my cousins would give him treats when we'd call get.
It was seriously funny and sad cause he hated that dog.

[Lorry]

As I sat here ready to type, a question mark paused my thought enough to look again and notice how effortless the last line and the first of the next flowed so we'll together.
Once felt, it is an intoxicating and enticing feeling we never tire of knowing on our lives, addicting us to its knowing of warmth and happiness that is always welcome in our lives, especially missed in the moments we notice how better it is to be with it than without.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Happy new year 🎉 Lorry.
Thank you. I wanted it to read smoothly with each repeated word adding depth. So often it sounds forced or mandated. I'm so pleased neither occurred.
A writer has a certain rhythm of speech and a writing may sound good when he or she reads it but is awkward for everyone else.
I'm qilty of that from time to time and need you all to keep me on track.

[Lorry]

Well, believeify this or so notly, but I get the feeling action I sufferate from that symtomation on ocassionality too 😊

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Cherrie, this is a clever write. A sonnet with the end word of each line, starting the following line. It flows beautifully and is meaningful with it. Lovely work dear poet. Happy new year to you.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Cherrie… so much Love ❤️ to give and so little time. Love to sleep under a Starry Sky…
Amen, Pat

[William Michael Reeves]

I also love the first and last wordplay. And it wrapped up so nice! Communication is such great material for poetry.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you William. I really liked the setup of this one and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[emmajoy]

Such an emotional poem and also has - the added literary use of the final word of each line starting the
following line oh so sensitively. Stay safe, Cherrie -and ever loved.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you Emma. I really enjoyed writing this one and like the ring of it. I so happy you like it too.

[Ken Simm.]

Romantically and physiologically wonderful. It flows spectacularly. It also shows deep understanding.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you so much Ken :)

[barleygirl]

I'm reading this as you being in a rapturous passionate love affair with your own chi, which then gives your creativity a mega-boost to the stars where it finds stardust to boost the fun! (((HUGS)))

[Cherrie Palmer]

Well I always do have a pocket full of stardust. Just in case of emergencies

[Cherrie Palmer]

I may have to make that into something

[barleygirl]

You may have to! *wink! wink!*

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Love's baptism...
It is important to be able to express how much we need another's love...how important that person is to us.
With that communication, we are anointed and can embark on a life together.'
j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I really enjoyed writing this one. It fell together really quickly. I liked using the last word of each sentence to start the new line.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, and that style doesn't always work...it is too noticeable too often.
with your poem, it is not, one line flows into the next, and I was not even conscious of that as I read it.
now I see it...but I like when it is so subtle with form that I don't become obsessed with that.
j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I am so glad to hear that. Thank you I am glad it didn't overshadow the poem.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Ahhh this is perfectly beautiful thanks made my day x