Footfall

bucolic passage whispers to the wind
skirting-leaves ease along the walkway
the wind barks and the trees tremor
as the wooden pathway moans
beneath clouds tightly joined
denying all light
darkness settles
and footfall
follows
me

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh-SO, Dear Poetess🍷

The Reverse Etheré or Etheree … such a charming and fun form to write in; rhyming is author's choice … usually centered, but aligned left is popular, too.
I very much like your picture choice, Cherrie, as it lends an "early times" (almost stark) ambiance to the mood, and the topic (though, beautifully haunting) sings a more somber, lonely-like melody.
My practiced eye did catch that there are only 9-lines, while 10 are required. It's because L7 (the 4-syllable line) is missing, and note that L1 has eleven syllables, rather than the required 10 … all very easy fixes. : )

Thank you for sharing this excellent effort … it is always a pleasure to read artists willing to spread their wings.
Good stuff, Cherrie … keep that brave pen dancing! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Cherrie]

Okay, I will look the rules up for this form. Don't tell anyone but I just liked the setup of dwindling syllables.

[Cherrie]

Round two. Take a peek.

[Richard🖌]

Spot-on, Cherrie! 😊

Excellent edits, Poetess! ⁓ RJ

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

when i read this i think of the bridges of madison county the way she walked along it and he was down there taking pics
sorry not relevant but when i read poems thats what happens lol
loved the serenity of your write beautiful lines thought i was there

[Cherrie]

What a beautiful and romantic heart you have:)

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

yes probably too much of a daydreamer lol

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

very ominous feel to this poem. it gave me chills and smiles at the same time.

[Cherrie]

Thank you:)

[Lorry]

I think this is all the more striking for its black and white imagery, as we wander into frame and realise there's a nip in the air and I forgot my usual six layers, but it's all good as at least I remembered my beanie ha-aaaa-and that's just flown away too! Hmm, I really should have put on more than the t shirt and boxers I slept in before travelling through a time portal disguised as a photograph. 🤔
Oldest trick in the book. How do you think I landed on this planet to begin with?
Oops! I mean, nothing!
Ps... Don't fear Cherrie, that footfall following is just the queue to take photographs of the bridge. 😊

[Cherrie]

Really all time portals should have a flashing disclaimer above them.

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! strong images .. "bucolic bridge..." great intro consonance says i! its pleasantness walking across as winter's skies and wind tighten in .. hmmmmmmmm then the turn ... spooky girl! reminds me of the hair standing up on me neck as a child as i raced up the stairs to bed .. as the last to go .. i had to turn out the lights .. each step drew me closer to my horror .. certain it was right behind me. nice work with contrast and turn my friend! strong scene setting ... really appreciate minimalism ,,,, thanks for sharing mon Cherrie! ;)
E.

[Cherrie]

I liked the idea of combining some cool sounds I like with the unknown which is a scary thing to us.

[Cherrie]

Ps I liked the opening too. Cool word of the day.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ......................

[John the Baptist]

A nicely set scene with a somewhat forbidding ending. Makes me think of Jack the Ripper.

[Cherrie]

Oh no that's not good for Jack. I'm packing.

[no tell writer]

I totally love this and the format. So nicely written

[Cherrie]

Thank you a little eerie fun.

[no tell writer]

I was going to say eerie, but was too shy to.. hope you have a lovely rest of your day

[Cherrie]

Well, next time you won't be so shy. :)

[barleygirl]

Love how you write with dynamic phrases & sensory for all the senses. I was feeling this little jaunt (((HUGS)))

[Cherrie]

Well whatever you do don't look over your shoulder

[Cherrie]

I love the word footfall. I find it sometimes in older work.

[barleygirl]

I agree. I love using words that are not commonly used.