triolet

stand by/maybe

Twinkle, twinkle goes my heart

Love's pure arrow found its mark

my love's first kiss flicked a spark.

Twinkle twinkle goes my heart. 

with a promise shall we start.

Like a sparrow finds its lark.

Twinkle twinkle goes my heart

Love's pure arrow found its mark.

Author's Note

Here's a diagram of the triolet: 8 syllables per line (will you settle for 7) :)
A (first line)
B (second line)
a (rhymes with first line)
A (repeat first line)
a (rhymes with first line)
b (rhymes with second line)
A (repeat first line)
B (repeat second line)

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Ah, Cherrie, Mon Ami 🍂

How wonderful to see you're still spreading your lovely, adventurous poetic wings.
As you now know, the Triolet is not quite as simple as the name implies … your displayed pattern proves this out for your fans and readers to try.
As a died-in-the-wool romantic, I truly adore your topic and creative lines, as I'm sure your sweet man does, as-well. : )
Referring to your "diagram", I see that L3 is off-rhyme with L1 (perhaps, "my love's first kiss sparked our start.") Or, some such.

You're still one of my favorite poetesses … big bless you hugs! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Cherrie Palmer]

This was a challenging style I was glad I tried it. I will see what I can do with it:) thank you for the suggestion

[Coyote Poetry]

so wonderful and so beautiful dear Cherrie. The words danced to perfect ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry. I enjoyed this one a lot.
Coyote

[Einstein Noodle]

awww lovely sentiment in your theme .. 7 works for me dahlink! you read this to your love of course ... right?! ;) a tight, easy flowing form says i a simple delight! I appreciate the amount of time you must have spent re-writing ... it seems a requirement for most .. not easy to fit the Idea within the constraints.
E.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Really I trapped myself the the opening line 'and liked it to well to change it. And yes of course I tormented Matt with yet another poem. Thank goodness he likes them or at least meand tolerates the earlier. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

he's a luck y man dahlink! :)))))))))

[Cherrie Palmer]

Come Hell or High Water as the saying goes I think we are very lucky to have each other. :) Been on the bike lately?

[Einstein Noodle]

nooooooo ... sold it a few months ago and just this week found the Pickup of my dreams .. a 1963 F100 step bed .. i wasn't necessarily looking for that specifically .. just an old truck to take me back and take me to town now and then... i feel blessed to have found this one and having sold the bike .. able to buy it. I wasn't intending to do much fixing other than routine maintenance .. but the bug bit ... i will do more than i intended but not to a showroom quality .. i still want to use is as a truck .. haul lumber, rocks, you know .. things! ;) later gator! such a sweet poem my friend!

[Cherrie Palmer]

old trucks my all time favorite I am so happy for you

[Cherrie Palmer]

exactly, if I ever buy a old truck it is going everywhere I go.

[Einstein Noodle]

I posted pics on FB ... it's a beauty! :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

Okay I want to see

[Einstein Noodle]

are you on FB? if you search Gene Malloy you can fined me. ;)

[Patricia Wedel]

“Like a sparrow finds its lark”
seems to settle on my 💜 Heart...
A triolet remains like ripples in a stream
where lovers kisses remain in dreams...
so very romantically entwined...
gently, Pat

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you so much Pat. I would like to try another one with 8 syllables per line

[Chris Shaw]

You are brave experimenting with form. I used to do that, but have now lost my appetite for counting beats and become lazy. You have penned an excellent triolet here. Well done Cherrie. Good to hear that love's arrow was right on target.

Chris

[Cherrie Palmer]

As a rule I stick to free form but from time to time I try. :)

[Fran Marie]

ah a nicely done
triolet in both
form and content
I 've done this form
before myself..
enjoyed this one

nice work

[Cherrie Palmer]

I may try another one where I use 8 syllables per line. Thank you for the encouragement:) I really appreciate it.