Danger Sudden Stop Ahead

Lover’s                                                                      leap.
Leads                                                                         to free fall.

Leaving                                                                     you breathless.
Losing all  perspective.

                                                        

Lifting you up  

as higher you soar.

Lulling your senses                                                      at dangers door.

Until the

Labor of love                                                            lapses.

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Can't think while we catch our breath from the labor of it. Then were in it so deep it's like we fell. I read Splat first because of the title, then this. Splat seemed like nonsense then this did make sense. I'm looking for 'Inked'. That was my favorite of the spoken ones.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I think I have 6 videos in all. I really like 'Inked' as well, it was a sunset I saw one day then raced home to pen.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I really liked the crazy effect of falling this poem has. Not my go-to style but I think it works.

[red93]

Very challenging structure and good to see someone who is very aware of form and how it can make such a difference in Poetry. I shall be following yr new Posts with interest.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I wanted the feeling of two bodies falling. At first I wasn't happy with it but it's growing on me. Thank you so very much for the review.

[Relic]

I was thinking something similar while talking to a couple the other day. Love grabs you like a vice wrapped in roses and blooms but after a while that same vice begins to prick you with thorns. Love is strange. You've got to work hard to make it last. Some are willing to, some are not.

[Cherrie Palmer]

kina reminds me of 38 Special 'Hold On Loosely' Some where along the way we have to find the balance in 'being one' but remaining two individuals ( four if ego's are in play).

[Relic]

Agreed, heard the song last night. ha

[emmajoy]

Wondering which came first: the truth be shown in the words or that wonderful lay-out! The two compliment each other so well- make for pauses between the one side, 'Emotion' and the dramatic movement left to right side of the words themselves. You have such an inventive mind, Cherrie. plus the skill to offer it. Thank you. Keep safe and smiling. Please.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I think the idea of falling came first, and it evolved to what it is. I'm not 100% I like the lay out 'as-is' but it's really close to what I want. :) may have to tweak it a bit.

[emmajoy]

Works fine to me, had read your poem yesterday,
saw it in its present lay-out and thought that and the words were more than complimentary. Looking twice now, maybe the right side facing could be a little less tidy, be a little frantic?
Cherrie, am anything but expert, only responding to your wonderings. Have a happily kind day, keep safe. : )

[Cherrie Palmer]

I like it will give that idea a try.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

why is it that we can't leap into love but still hold on to perspective...

somehow they just don't mesh...and yes, first we soar but then we come back to earth...
and it does become a labor.
stinging but identifiable words here, Cherrie.
j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Good morning Jacob thank you for swinging by. I think love is a leap but to many make it a blind one.
I bet your ready for a break from classes won't be long now.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am on a break now until June 7 and then summer class....I am good with a week break but then get antsy to get back to it...I love teaching.
Have a good weekend, my friend.'
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I love it the way it is the layout is good too
We are blind sighted in love yes till it’s too late
Good write ✍️ enjoyed
Good metaphor

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you:) Julie I just can't decide if I'm happy with it. I really appreciate your review of this one.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

No worries
Good luck with decisions lol
I’m different I’m a bit slack once I put mine up I leave lol 😂

[Cherrie Palmer]

Actually I can go either way. Even I keep dusting it off or I hop to the next page, and keep going.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Ok thanks 🙏
Take care

[Chris Shaw]

The layout lends itself well to this short poem Cherrie. You fall in love , you soar in love and it's also quite possible to fall out of love. Let's hope the soaring stage lasts forever. I like the fact that danger is mentioned in the title. Falling in love certainly gets us topsy turvy.

Chris

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you for the review.
I'm not sure I'm happy with this one and may change it up.