Jaded Past

I'm just jumping on the bandwagon

Jeweled eyes of Jade fail to see me.

Like icy cold waters your gaze now chills me.

Those gems of the sea I once adored look past me.

No longer to swim in your essence deeply.

Pricked from a Jaded past you wound me.

And I in turn allow my stormy greys to leave thee.

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm curious to know what bandwagon you refer to? I can't remember the last time I read poetry from you, so this is an extra special delight. Your plentiful prose is very poetic and I've seen your advice NOT to abandon your lyricism just becuz you're switching from poetry to prose. I love how you use "jade" as a color and as a state of mind. I love your use of various hues, taken together, are reminiscent of being underwater or in the sea. As always, your dynamic verb choices keep things bright (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Cherrie]

What ever day it was I
Wrote this every post I read was sad and filled with heartbreaking, I teased someone about being jaded, and wa-la here ya go.

[Crowley]

Its all in the eyes...the good ones give me the chills. Its where I start, probably most others too, but a good pair of eyes and I am hooked. The love, the lust, the rebuff. I loved this!

[Cherrie]

I agree the eyes say so much about a person.
Thank you nice to see you back in the neighborhood.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

This sounds like a time when someone has given up on someone else who seems to have never appreciated ones presence.

Sometimes it is painful to let go, with life not giving any other options.

How painful it used to be when someone we cherish become someone we used to know...

[Cherrie]

Now there is a poem in that for you to flesh out.
someone we used to know...

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Do you mean writing on it?

[Cherrie]

That line you said, ..Someone We Used To Know ...would make a awesome poem for you to write.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Alright, Cherrie.
I'll work on that.

[emmajoy]

' Like icy cold waters your gaze now chills me. '

Jade is so lovely to see, even more to touch: the lines its been given at source or created by artistic skill is strangely warm and inviting. So, the word 'jaded' nudges me sad. To have anything - be it love, lust, litany or laughter 'jaded' infers something that never had true value - surely sad as hell.

That said, Cherrie, whatever you write, you use such a rhythmic knowledge and understanding of just how words should be placed, whether fact or fiction! Your husband's eyes may well sparkle at that hint of shimmering green when he sees how you address the best behind the scenes!

[Cherrie]

I'm with you I love jade, both sight and feel, and loved the idea of blending the images.
Thank you for the review I'm glad to know you got to share this one with me.
And.
The poor man has suffered through a lifetime of my readings.

[emmajoy]

He loves you.. I can tell and that's why he suffers happily.

By the way, forgive my often or not absence.. involved with a gigantic horti' commission Have so much to plan, do, etc. can only call in when I need brief tho often desperately needed escape! :)

[Cherrie]

You my escape in my neck of the woods anytime.
I'll dish you up a slice of apple/cherry cobbler.

[emmajoy]

Yes, please! On my way... :)

[Paul Bell]

If this is the end, it's a real bitter ending.
God, how love can change course when time moves on.
The sea so calm suddenly leaves you for dead.

[Cherrie]

Bitter: Yes, i see that. It does seem there is few choices in breaking off a relationship.

[Paul Bell]

Quick as possible usually does it.

[Coyote Poetry]

When hopeful eyes turn grey. We learn love can be great storms. Thank you dear Cherrie for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You capture the sentiment of this situation in those two opening lines as it sets that all too often played out scene, as love is felt to slip away. Of course we see the eyes as not just symbols but as voices, as the in built lie detector. Not so sure about the need to stick to a 'rhyming scheme when using repitition as full stops though and in the final line there is more impact by dropping the thee and saying:
'And I in turn allow my stormy greys to leave.'?

[Cherrie]

Huh, I the I like that ending better.
I liked the humor element of leave thee, but I agree your ending is a stronger one.
:)

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Cherrie... you have uncovered a source of love and nurturing...
and at the same time... life is bittersweet and at times can leave us Jaded...
when we lose a treasure to the winds of time and fate. An eloquent poem
that leaves a feeling of sadness. truly, Pat

[Cherrie]

Thank you Pat
It is impossible to keep the joy of youth, and from time to time I like to play with the word and notion of, jaded.

[Patricia Wedel]

Jade has a history of warmth and healing. And to have a feeling of jaded is part of life... and the play on words seems to me a natural flow as nature begins to take its toll and we become one with one another in poetry and revelations of lessons learned. truly, Pat p.s. may the feathery feelings of life entwine around your heart.

[LitStar]

suttle words

gallantly expressed



I like this write

[Cherrie]

Thank you LitStar, i had fun setting this to rhyme.

[LitStar]

you're welcome

[John the Baptist]

An image laden and elegant way of saying, screw me twice, shame on me.

[Cherrie]

LOL, I love your take on this poem a great summary.
Thank you,