Writing hint 1

Writing hint 1

A Story by Cherrie Palmer
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Building tension

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I am going to try this tonight. 

I read an article that says you can build tension by making longer sentences and paragraphs(readers tend to breath where the punctuation is). 

So, once you hit the mark where action begins transition to short sentences (the reader will go from holding their breath,waiting for you to tell them to breath, to breathing quickly). I do the latter a lot but I have not put them together for this effect. 

Let's see?

If any one try's this before I do in the comments tell me the story you used it for.

© 2019 Cherrie Palmer


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Tension can be just as effective with shorter sentences too of some roght

Posted 5 Years Ago


Cherrie Palmer

5 Years Ago

Yes, I like using shorter sentences too.
I did try the above method of going long then at .. read more
Jolan H

5 Years Ago

Yeah I tried once, it was okay but I found staying focused on the character most likely to crack in .. read more
Cherrie Palmer

5 Years Ago

I like to think about the elements of a good campfire ghost story and try to keep those elements in.. read more
my sentences tend to be quite long ones, I dunno why coz they rarely make sense.. but just for you... I'm gonna post the first chapter of a would be novel I have been juggling with for ages... thanks for the tip.. the iceberg remains to be seen... Have a blessed day..

Neville

Posted 5 Years Ago


Sort of like that idea of the axe falling slowly.
Don't know how long you can actually slowly chop someone's head off though.
I'll think on this one.



Posted 5 Years Ago


Cherrie Palmer

5 Years Ago

Well let's stretch out the walk to the deed, then off with his head.
Paul Bell

5 Years Ago

You seen the size of those axes. You don't want to be carrying them for long. Suppose I could take i.. read more
Cherrie Palmer

5 Years Ago

Draw a happy face on it's head, slap a raspberry beret on it and no one will give it a second notice.. read more
Interesting and worth considering.....................................................................................thanks Cherrie.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


Cherrie Palmer

5 Years Ago

I think so too. I have done both things to set a pace, but I've never worked it for an one, two punc.. read more
I notice sentence length & how it affects me as I'm reading other people's stuff, but I have to admit, I hardly ever pay attention to my own efforts in this area. I hardly do suspenseful writing, but maybe I'll try to think of something to practice on. Your helpfulness is always interesting & well-presented! Thanks! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


Cherrie Palmer

5 Years Ago

I think it might work with other kind of writings as well.
you could set the back-drop for th.. read more

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Added on May 29, 2019
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Cherrie Palmer
Cherrie Palmer

Springfield , MO



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I am a published poet and love poetry. After a lifetime of country living, I'm making a move back to town. I find my surroundings a great inspiration to me. I also have two books on Amazon Kindle: .. more..

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