Sleeping Baby

The cycle of life

Sleeping  baby. 

Sleeping  child.

Waking teen

going wild.

Barely legal, 

young and free,

judging parents 

like you and me. 

Grandma waiting 

for the news.

A momma crying 

as baby coos.

Mother young 

relives her past

with a sleeping 

babe at her breast. 

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Cherrie... I remember those days when our
children were sleeping babes. We loved and nourished them.
Now they have children of their own. We watch them grow and develop
and experience the beauty of nature and how the wind blows the
willow trees and many other mysteries. A beautiful poem of fulfillment
and wonderment. truly, Pat

[Cherrie]

thank you Pat,
It's so true, we negotiate life everything between growing up, and making babies, then out of no where we settle back to watch our babies do the same, and that never gets old.

[Relic]

The circle of life indeed. Like father like son, like mother like daughter. It must be in the genes, or the economic circumstances which I've found have a lot to do with it.

Nice one, Cherrie. The short sentences make the flow faster which in a lot of cases grabs the readers attention.

[Cherrie]

Thank you
Ya know I wanted it to flow fast like just like life. Zipping by in a flash.
:) thank you for the visit

[Rye]

awww, this is such a sweet write, so nicely done.

[Cherrie]

I completely missed your review. I'm sorry for not seeing it. Thank you so:)

[Paul Bell]

Time always moves on.
One minute you're bringing them up, the next minute they're bringing the kids round to you.
On the plus side, you get to give them back.

[Cherrie]

I do like that part

[Crowley]

Awww...this made me teary, love my kids and grandkids so much. You have a special way writing about life. I love it...so glad you are still around.

[Cherrie]

Thank you, I glad too it's good to write with friends who share the passion.

[Davidgeo]

I like that the simplicity still retains emotional impact. I can't stop thinking about The Lion King song "Circle of Life".

[Cherrie]

Thank you David.
I am a fan of simple and the lion king. :)
I don't like the cloak and dagger wording many use where your never sure of what was said.

[Davidgeo]

It all has it's place and we all have our tastes. Simple is usually better and also usually harder.

[Cherrie]

I'm not sure if one is harder. I'm going to think about that. Writing gives me joy so I keep to what I know (even though I have a bad habit of reading articles about the craft).
I'm not one to deliberate over the piece, I try to let it simply unfold.Truth be told I'm more of a shoot from the hip writer. Now when I'm done I will fuss over words. Some to swap out, others to cut altogether.
If I can't get it to flow I chop it, or tuck it away till my perspective changes.

[Davidgeo]

I think fitting a complex idea into a simple collection of words is always more difficult. There's always going to be a few writers who can paint beautiful pictures with complex and long winded prose but they are few and far between... Old Billy Shakespeare is my favorite example of that. But I've always been more partial to word economists like Cormac McCarthy. That whole "say a lot in a few words" kinda thing, ironically, takes more effort and requires a more deliberate grasp on the subject matter.

[Cherrie]

I agree with that I would rather read 200 well placed words that explode with images than struggle through 1000 words of superior effect.

[Neville]

this is precisely what you say it is my friend, a simple, flowing demonstration and dedication to the cycle of life, penned near to perfection

Neville

[Lea Sheryn]

Lovely! The essence of life written in a few words. Well done!

[Cherrie]

Each phase seems like yesterday.

[Chris Shaw]

You have captured so well here Cherrie what happens within family situations. Rarely does everything turn out hunky dorey. There are many complications on the way when you raise children. They certainly tests your wits to the extremes at times, but then what would life be without them? Pretty empty.

Chris

[Cherrie]

Thank you Chris, yes wouldn't it be great if family behaved like a well crafted poem. :)

[raj24]

Simple and meaningful. My son just turns one so it really made me realize what's coming my way. Thanks for sharing :)

[Cherrie]

It's a wonderous journey for the whole family, not always a happy journey but if your lucky and a willing heart one filled with love.

[raj24]

Very true :)