Wonderful use of words and thoughts. I enjoyed the description. Made me see and feel the desire to feel the sun. Here in Michigan, can go thirty days without beloved sun. Thank you Cherrie for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Cherrie... your writing is soft and lovely as the falling snow..... My son is married to Leilani who is the mother of two young girls. My granddaughters are half Navajo and they learn the dances and many customs. They attend school in SLC, Utah and their Father my son Robert takes them 🎣 sometimes on top of the mountain. Best wishes, Pat
That is memories that will last a lifetime. That would make a good story forvyou to make for them. .. read moreThat is memories that will last a lifetime. That would make a good story forvyou to make for them. You could make them dancing flowers or something like that
4 Years Ago
dear Cherrie... thanks for encouraging to write a story for my granddaughters. They are 5 and 7... .. read moredear Cherrie... thanks for encouraging to write a story for my granddaughters. They are 5 and 7... the
perfect age to appreciate a story about them dancing among flowers with faces of them with little faces.
The second and third lines are my favorite. truly, Pat
4 Years Ago
I'm so glad you did. To me there us no better gift than to build a loved one their very own tale.
Gorgeous, lyrical poetry. Great use of classical language and sweet, fable-like style. “Night now full the day complete so too the moon laid low to sleep”- perfect line. Lilting flow and beautiful rhyme. Pristine, vivid jewels of imagery. I loved this from beginning to end Cherrie.
I write so many things for my granddaughter. Years ago I made her a morning song. That I sung to h.. read moreI write so many things for my granddaughter. Years ago I made her a morning song. That I sung to her each day. She's almost 11 and I decided to make her a night time poem for rest.
5 Years Ago
Im so glad you enjoyed it. I really had fun with it.
So wonderful about writing for your granddaughter. I have three grandsons (twins are 10 and younger .. read moreSo wonderful about writing for your granddaughter. I have three grandsons (twins are 10 and younger one 8) that I love to write for. One of the twins is writing poetry himself now.
5 Years Ago
Yes Peyton likes to write. She has a fascination with journals and finding her story.
Wonderful use of words and thoughts. I enjoyed the description. Made me see and feel the desire to feel the sun. Here in Michigan, can go thirty days without beloved sun. Thank you Cherrie for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
The imagery here is so beautiful!
"The little breeze laid down her head" and "A jealous sun blazed so bright and dried the day, then fell the night" are my favourite lines. I especially like the rhythm of the second line I quoted.
I noticed someone else (Lydia) commented that this was like a lullaby - I agree. Lovely work.
I was talking to HL the other day about morning songs I use to sing to my granddaughter. Then I dec.. read moreI was talking to HL the other day about morning songs I use to sing to my granddaughter. Then I decided I wanted one for .bedtime
I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
I am a published poet and love poetry. After a lifetime of country living, I'm making a move back to town. I find my surroundings a great inspiration to me. I also have two books on Amazon Kindle: .. more..