erased

Billowing fog laced so tight

Ignites my imagination.

While a gentle zephyr climbs the sloop

its tender touch drapes over.

The fog and she begins a dance

Perfectly timed with a 2,4 beat.

Warming sun kissed her face and in its grasp

The morning fog is erased.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Dream like images with that warming sun chasing the cold mist as it asserts its authority upon the earth. A nicely penned piece. Loved that opening line!

[Cherrie]

Good morning John,
and Thank you .

[Wonderland Asylum]

I love the images that are created in my mind while reading this.

[Cherrie]

Thank you Catrina
I find fog to be an inspiring element. That always takes on a mood all its own.

[Matt]

This reminds me of mornings by the ocean, especially the image at the end, how quickly the sun can come out and erase the mist. I love fog too, it's beautiful and oddly inspiring. You do a good job of capturing that.

[Cherrie]

We live by the white river and bull shoals lake I find the fog refreshing and peaceful.
I seem to write about alot.

[Judy Emery/ Lilly Emery]

A beautiful write thank you for sharing.

[Cherrie]

thank you Lilly, I'm glad to see you enjoyed my poem:)

[barleygirl]

I very much enjoy the way your poem weaves the wispy damp sensations of being in marine fog. It seems your punctuation is strange – makes it hard to read with a flowing rhythm, which your words naturally have, except for the interruptions of seemingly misplaced punctuation!?!?! That’s why I use minimal punctuation myself. But we each have our own styles. I love the way your poem starts out windy & foggy, but then the ending brings a clearing trend – a perfect analogy for how some days can be! (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[Cherrie]

Thank you for such a generous review.

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I sure do enjoy a morning fog and evening mist. Nature's way of blanketing the earth in its own cocoon until the dawning sun snatches her away.

You have described the phenomenon very well. Nicely written.

[Cherrie]

Thank you :)

[KCthelastboyscout]

I always thought of the fog as a nuisance or hiding a terrible secret that has yet to get revealed.i never thought of much beauty to it until reading this.great use of your imagination

[Cherrie]

I love the fog it's mysterious and beautiful. I so glad you liked it.
P S it is also a great place to hide a great beast.

[Rebecca]

sounds like a great idea. Great ideas are like gold that needs to go through the fire and find rebirth like a phoenix. Anyways, this feels like the beginning of a long poem; did you intend metaphors?

[Cherrie]

I seldom write a long poem. I don't set out to write a poem of a certain length the poem just leads me. Kind of like my nature poems, o 've I decide the mood that belongs to the setting I try to capture what I see and keep the mood intact.
As far as metaphors go I take advantage of them a some. However I think we want everything to relate to the way we experience life so sometimes the reader creates their own metaphors you.
If you take 10 students that read a poem about an old tree they would all speculate what the deep inner meaning us. While the poet was just capturing a moment in time. :)

[Cherrie]

PS I loved your review thank you

[Kelly Scheppers]

Never before has fog been so illuminated by the English language. Wow, this is writing to curl up with when the world turns cold. I feel a chill coming on...

[Cherrie]

Thank you Kelly I am mesmerized by the fog. It always puts me in the mood to write.

[Kelly Scheppers]

...just like a rainy day brings out the need for some comfort food!

[Cherrie]

Oh yeah when i was little we always made cookies on rainy days. To this day I have the urge to bake when it rains

[Neville]

Is there a marriage between fog and mist....both can impact on how we see the world and how we might even feel about it....both can be beautiful to observe too methinks and of course, both are only transitory... whether we see more clearly when they have dissipated, remains to be seen.... methinks again..... I liked, cheers...........N

[Cherrie]

Poetic thoughts indeed

[Neville]

my pleasure............