glimpse

retreat

the sky

elope

the stars

 

our color 

has 

truly 

gone

 

sun swept 

whispers kept

 

dawns hearts

must fade

 

their cadence

come

undone 

Reviews

[Wendy G.]

This one is interesting and clever, however it carries less emotion than the others I've read from you. An experiment, I assume?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

hearts live for the day, but recede at dusk...yet the whispers keep finding there way to us as memories...

left side poem, right side poem...and together they watch the sun rise and the sun set. as one poem.

[icelandicblue]

This hangs on a silken thread like a lovely wind chime calling out from the garden, its song is ever so slightly mournful. It's a beautiful poem and once more I must commend you for your unique construction.

[Corset]

This is gorgeous as well as wistful and a bit melancholy, the changing of seasons have such a profound depth of essence, it's almost like you can sit from the edge of the universe and watch the slideshow the sun and moon into the next season, time feels effervescent today.