clear beginnings

shook you off
  like cellophane
stuck there
           on the tip of my
mind
again

carefully
     you wrapped around
     me
neither protecting
          nor obscuring
but somehow
      deliberately 
holding everything
          in place

the answers came
     much more slowly
     hidden in the dark deluge
          quiet constant cascade
of questions
          questions
                    questions
until i found the 
          jagged teeth of my
               (was it always there)
          understanding

confined confidence 
and knowing
          obscured only
          by glare
     your smile always was
such clever
subterfuge
               
alone in our space
     (alone?)
     i breathe full
one second
two
     quietly, hope fibrillates 
               as i intently seek
the seam 
               of us

Reviews

[FateDictates]

You come up with the most insane words...
'shook you off
like cellophane
stuck there
on the tip of my
mind
again'

am such a fan...

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Okay, every time I visit your work and say... oh I am just going to read one and comment... that never happens! I end up becoming a poem junkie reading a ton more, even the ones I have already read like 5 times.... really... think I need a patch to kick this. ANYway, I digress, this poem is spectacular! You had me by the first stanza ... "shook you off like cellophane stuck there on the tip of my mind again" WOW, loved that line, so perfect. Then you make the jaw drop with the last lines..."quietly, hope fibrillates as i intently seek the seam of us" Fantastic writing as usual. Adore this.

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you so much, Kalypso! Now all i need to do is clone you a few million times and i'd be a best seller ;)

CM.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

haha, oh i missed this otherwise I would have commented sooner that no one needs to have clones of me running around... pure chaos ...:P

[ChemicalMadness]

i feel like i might not mind ;)

[emmajoy]

'.. .. alone in our space ~ (alone?) ~ i breathe full ~ one second ~ two ~ quietly, hope fibrillates ~ as i intently seek ~ the seam ~ of us '

Such strong thoughts touched with doubts, yet drowning in love. Maybe the poet in the man analyses too much, maybe arms and mind should open more than ..

Fine, fine writing.

[ChemicalMadness]

i love your read. thank you so much for taking the time to share! hope all's well with you.....
read morei love your read. thank you so much for taking the time to share! hope all's well with you.....

CM.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that seam isn't always easy to find...and the balance, and the answers to whether the other really loves us or is using us for some purpose. Is it subterfuge? maybe...and maybe we are just held down sometimes by love.

[ChemicalMadness]

i'm not sure its always so clear, what's holding us down - or back, or up....but something always binds, all the same (which isn't meant to read as a constant negative - we need something to hold us together, after all, don't we?)....

great feedback. thank you, Jacob.
CM.