still

from under mountains

            i looked

 

between the labor of forced

breaths

and dense sighs

            mud thick with sickening

            doubt

i stole what was all

    i had left

 

a glance

with heart unclouded

            heavy burdened soul

every fiber

            of longing

            splintered but strong

like stray wires of twine

wrapped tight

around a small box

            of simple memories

 

eyes tugging,

white cresents in my palms

revealed

points of pressure

            years of concern

a discernable end

red and revealing

            slow fading

 

better to recede than retreat

 

in the still

i found the stillness

of us

and we were

                        still

Reviews

[lost girl]

The experience you share with your words is like no other. There are very few that can transform raw emotion into phrase so simple... it becomes energy linked ... it glides through one's soul leaving it's reader both wired and spent. Kudos!!!!!!

[K. Louis]

in the still
i found the stillness
of us
and we were
still

What a fantastic rhythm...greatness in here.

[Ed Hart]

i like everything about this, its structure, its pace, its breathe...thanks for taking me back to the weight of mountains

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you, Ed.

[Frieda P]

Exactly what I needed to read this morning, this really resonated with me, being 'still' is sometimes not as easy as it sounds.

a glance
with heart unclouded
heavy burdened soul
every fiber
of longing
splintered but strong
like stray wires of twine
wrapped tight
around a small box
of simple memories

Outstanding CM! Going in my favorites....

[ChemicalMadness]

well, you returned the favor and gave me a smile. thank you.

[Emily B]

your words are absolutely perfect and i am glad to experience them today

[ChemicalMadness]

thank you, emily!