cicada's rhythm

inasmuch as i breathe

            i am here

 

dark in this place

mired

in blood red tympani

 

warm beds

turned over

            impossibly slow

            impossibly so

unearthed potential

in deafening call

            and response

 

these echos strain

            their alien reach

rhythmically mocking my own ability

 

focus

inasmuch as we come together

we are voices

apart

 

this cymbal clangs,

meaning passed through decibels

my storyline opaque

black as wings

 

the dying breed

was bred to dream,

            in slumber live

            in waking, walking resplendent

in moments

            those cries

            (loud as anything)

invitation hangs

            as the years come down

            once more

            to one question

 

will you?

 

and you will

            so we do

            and in doing

            we so die

not before returning

            souls

            to the dark

           

    

Reviews

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Okay so, as I was on my hunt for your treasured poems and I stumbled across this one and had to read it, the title just screamed out to me. When I first moved out to the midwest I had never heard a cicada before and was completely freaked when I heard the deafening song they sign all summer long! Get a multitude of them going and it will keep you up at night for sure. Anyway, I digress... I love how your incorporated this unique sound into your poem, and twisted your dream like words around it.

"the dying breed
was bred to dream,
in slumber live
in waking, walking resplendent
in moments
those cries
(loud as anything)
invitation hangs
as the years come down
once more
to one question

will you?"

Those lines just stood out to me... awesome work as usual. Now back to the task at hand. ;)

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you so much, K. I appreciate you taking the time to read and respond. It's amazing how comforting such and alien sound can grow to be....
CM.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Very true... I tend to want to immerse myself in that trill now... very interesting that you brought that to my attention.. cool. :)

[K. Louis]

CM, This piece was truly beautiful. The way you architected your words in this was poetic brilliance. From top to bottom, I wouldn't change a thing. There's a quiet yearning in your work that is so intriguing to me. Great work!...btw, it's good to see more from you, I was waiting for that! ;)

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you so much, K. You know how to make a guy feel good - I'm so glad you connect with my work here.

[ChemicalMadness]

CM I love your writing! it speaks to me. I read, paused, entered, read paused, and I feel this... nothing more need to be said.

- Elisa

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you so much! You know I'm a fan of yours, so I'm truly flattered...

As am I when I have you by, I can't wait to read more of your fantastic purity.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

will you?

and you will
so we do
and in doing
we so die
not before returning
souls
to the dark

--favorite bit of this one (though i doubt the formatting is going to stick in the review, so just be warned). I love the idea of the question "will you?" and then the statement of "you will", but basically we're going to die in the doing. You expound upon the inevitable.

Beautiful imagery here...on the surface, the sounds were wonderful, and the feel was in your unique, cryptic, stylistic form. Beneath the surface, I sense a good deal of searching going on. I feel that feeling that I myself get when I know I have to sit still, but all that I want to do is jump out of my skin and run down the street naked and screaming (yes I have those thoughts, and no, my therapist doesn't think they make me crazy...per se :) Anyway...this one has a lot between the lines, like most of your work, and with the way that you choose your language and phrasing, there is no way of getting around the desire to read between them. So...well done...

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you, GF...I'm glad you felt both the implicit and the explicit...you always know how to read me. Perhaps you're developing a CM Decoder ring? ;)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I wish you'd send me one...or maybe one of those little blue pills from the Matrix, because I still swear that I can see Neo in that pane of glass in your profile pic...haha