waiting well

these days

                (the weight of them)

 

i draw breath

                in riddled buckets

 

pulling up

                dankly resolute wishes

 

tarnished tokens

                silt-shrouded in honest reservoirs

                forgotten

 

tired hands

                drive hard under blind eye

 

but reaching minds

                (like faltering hands)

 

could never well

                hold dreams

 

or  water

Reviews

[Oceana]

One of my favorite things as a reader is coming across work made of few words but evokes great feelings. Very well done, CM

[Emily B]

i felt these words deeply

wishing you well

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you, Emily. So happy to see you stopping in :)

[Emily B]

i needed these words today :)

i need a nap, too, maybe i'll just come back and re-visit these words every so often

[shythatway]

Hmm. I'm trying, but getting stuck on words with double meanings. English isn't my (1st) language, and reading your poems often ships me straight off to the online dictionary. (Which is a good thing. Trust me.). For now, I'm seeing someone staring down into a near bottomless well of unfilled dreams, feeling both time and dreams slipping through his/her fingers.. It's both sad and beautiful though. That much, I can grasp.

[ChemicalMadness]

I keep forgetting you speak elvish!! ;). If you felt anything at all, my friend, I'm happy!

[shythatway]

Haha. :) All the elves felt it, rest assured. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the weight of decisions and how they affect our dreams...evident here...i like the double meanings of waiting and weight ---like Hamlet who deliberated and then felt the guilt of procrastination...the irony of the title...when waiting is not well, "well" nor a good thing to do all the time...we should just go for it.

we often put off dreams by thinking on them for too long...and then we only achieve them in our minds..which of course, doesn't really "hold them, or water."

another intriguing write from you..more abstract than meets the eye, i think.

love it.

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you. There were certainly several layers I had in mind. I always enjoy your interpretations.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Okay, I'm not going to say "cryptic" because I don't want you to get the wrong idea... :) Another great write, my friend. The final idea is what really set this one off for me:

but reaching minds
(like faltering hands)

could never well
hold dreams

or water

These last lines are quite genius in their stark realism. The weight of this write, despite how concise it is, is quite heavy. I'm sensing a questioning of motives, ideals, and "ways that we expected the world to be" here. I love questions, even when they have no answers.

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you. I can always count on you for a good read :)