breakfast between

still morning

                over coffee

impossible orange yolk

                spilled across plates

i muse thoughtless

                over raising our own

chickens

corners of your mouth turn

       quietly wicked

                i never knew you could raise

                kitchens

off-handed conversation

                my pulse quickens

Reviews

[Emily B]

off handed, it might even be imagined, i like the nebulous and airy nature of the wit

i like these, i think i have about 40 chickens by now . . .

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you, Emily....wish i had some chickens.

[Emily B]

they are good for something :)

[redflutterby]

You say so much with the fewest words! I see a couple here casually considering the future and its expansion with children. I love your style...it appears to flow out so easily. ;-)

[ChemicalMadness]

i appreciate the feedback! thank you for the kind words.

[Oceana]

Your mind is so creative. You string together phrases I never would've dreamed of: "i never knew you could raise kitchens." Very impressive!

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you so much!

[Debbie_Philly]

Really enjoyed this !! Great piece :)

[ChemicalMadness]

thank you so much for reading and responding!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yeah that "raise kitchens" great line...but then, they are like children, the "impossible orange yolk"---and then the off handed conversation it is time to raise more...we have to have them first.

such interesting writes from you, always.

just abstract enough..this is so william carlos wiliams. so black Mountain in its effect.

[ChemicalMadness]

a couple of things here. First, thank you. I always love the way you approach others (mine included) work....it's obvious to say you're a thoughtful reviewer, given your background, but it holds. next, that is (I believe) the second time you've compared my work to william carlos williams, so I now need to get myself more familiar with his work. On a related topic, I had to google Black Mountain.
I cannot tell you how flattered I am by your remarks. Again, Thank You.
CM

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it may not be the last time i compare you to him...

there is a similarity...but that said..you are definitely your own voice..

[shythatway]

Raise kitchens.. huh? I've said it before, but it's phrases like this.. I'm filled with expectations every time I read something from you. :)

[ChemicalMadness]

it's still a bit shocking that ANYONE connects with what I put together...when I wrote this, I truly had my doubts. I understand that we all do - but it's really so comforting to know that you've enjoyed my chaos.
Even if you told me you thought this last piece was awful, I share what I'm about to share: I really hope to see some work from you soon. I'm a big fan of what you do as well. just sayin.....

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Hmm...a little bit of sexual tension in the morning, what's better? Honestly, though, you always manage to pen the "mundane" in an extraordinary light. You shine among coffee cups and egg yolks, that's saying something.

I also have to make a note about your lines, formatting and wording...you have a natural gift. I wish that I was a sure about being out of the box as you are. When I'm at all nervous or unsure of my writing I revert to the traditional four line stanza with even line lengths (syllabically) and then I'm suddenly ordinary. You are never ordinary in this way; it is as if you have been writing for your entire life and I know that you haven't, so I have to give you major points for your ability to be out of the box.

[ChemicalMadness]

GF, you spoil me. Thank you.
CM.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

maybe a little, but I am always honest :)