Familiar Seen

tell me
again

    our story

my heart beat
   a path

     straight to my brain

the second i saw you

   again

the first is never 

the first

   as many feet walk 

with purpose

   so too do hearts

         in daydreams wander

and even as conspiring winds

wipe clean

the hint of every

     you

so too do i know

the shape of your

    soul

lost traveler

wrong turns render

misread directions 

   indelible

and each time the sky smiles

through pursed lips

    and secret glints

my heart replays 

(on quiet screen)

the first time 

i never saw you

Reviews

[Frieda P]

'The first time I never saw you'....wow, that's money right there, got lost in your poetry as it resonates & vibrates and it smacked me across the face, love the 'sky smiling with pursed lips and secret glints' too! Just love the entire read, nice one CM!

[Shane William]

This is how you make someone feel with words. Absolutely brilliant. Do I have to explain why? Well I know why, but I'm still taking it all in. Is this one of your favorites because it is now one of mine.

[ChemicalMadness]

Thanks so much. I am fond of this one, yes :)

[Debbie_Philly]

Wonderful write... it reads beautifully.... very much felt !!

[emmajoy]

There's far more to this than the words above, 'the first time I never saw you ' ..
suggests a some time wishful thinking, surely. This has a smooth silky passion to it. almost a come hither tone. And you begin, 'the second i saw you again.. ' - the feelings are turned inside out. Perhaps

[ChemicalMadness]

thank you so much for your thoughts here...and turned inside out is a valid way to come at this one....I was playing with a few things here, the most prevalent being the idea of kindred spirits, love across lifetimes, and having seen someone you've never seen before - which would totally turn you inside out. i feel you got this spirit of this quite well.....
CM.

[TL Boehm]

my heart beat a path straight to my brain. Love that line

[Jay]

What a wonderful poem! That last line (oh, if I had a dollar for every review that ever says "that last line!"...) ~ that last line ties it up and brings it into place like a press-stud button: eloquently.

I am a 'sometime fan' of consonance and tight aliteration, and this piece stands as a great reflection of why one would admire those devices. By will or intuition, you've employed them so smoothly here, and made the reading a affecting ride. It's a sensate experience ~ much admired and greatly appreciated by this reader.

But that last line! It's a marvellous counterpoint. A deft touch. To my sensibilities, it's a great way to cap off a really good write.

I like it, CM. Nice job.

[ChemicalMadness]

Contrary to what you may believe, you DO give incredibly valuable reviews!! :). Thank you so much for taking the time to share your thoughts with me....it truly meant a lot!

[shythatway]

This was really beautiful. And the second I saw you again / the first time I never saw you. I think I'll go to my cave and ponder for a while..

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you, my friend. So glad you enjoyed!!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Oh, I really liked this one...one of your best I think. I love the way that used wordplay and intricatly designed imagery in such a gentle and easy way. Sublime, my friend, but also quite sad in a gentle way. More, you must write more! :)

[ChemicalMadness]

You make me smile. Thank you.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Glad to brighten up your little corner of the world whenever I can :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

also like the play on words in the title.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oooo i love the last two lines...i like the turn of phrase you use.
"wipe clean/ the hint of every you"

all the mistakes..and sometimes with the same person...it all comes to the surface again when we run into an old flame...

i like your work...there is enough, just enough abstractness...and you have the good short lines and pace...we can dance with your poems to what ever steps we seem to feel....

really nice work.

jacob

[ChemicalMadness]

I can ask for nothing more than what you said about dancing however you'd like...huge compliment. Grazie Mille, chill-berto ;)