19 days of you

19 days of rain
sweat stuck and twisted up
in shell shocked sheets
never seen dreams like these
where heat seems to freeze
every other breath
satiates
and oh god
won't these pounding
drowning drops ever
slip stop, take a break?
furious minds filled fast
like too small tin buckets
always breathless pushed
to overflow
and inside sideways
hand holds
wrist tight
lightly skirting
control
too late to be tamed
teeth touch with no remorse
no intention of changing
course
bitten like lips bee stung
and flung hard against
my chest, fingers slide smooth
gliding lightly
heavy in the humid fog
of what must surely be
stretching farther than these sheets
had dreamed

Water cold
spills like quiet truth
across lips teeth tongue
as you mistake
my eyes
for gods
like urgent lies
we come undone

Outside the rain
falls like heartbeats

19 days of rain
and I still can't shake
the taste of
you

Reviews

[Liderien]

A great write! Thank you for your feature presentation. I enjoyed it and feel a little inspired to write now. :)

[ChemicalMadness]

Thanks! Not my typical subject matter really...but for some reason, this one just came out....glad you enjoyed

[Angi]

Furiously sexy! These lines. Yes!

hand holds
wrist tight
lightly skirting
control
too late to be tamed
teeth touch with no remorse
no intention of changing
course
bitten like lips bee stung

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you. So glad you enjoyed.

[shythatway]

A song came to mind. The old, rusted cadillac sinking into the field under the weight of the rain.. I'm not sure why, there was nothing quiet about this. It's excellent. We've all mistaken eyes for gods..

[ChemicalMadness]

Thanks so much for reading and letting me know what you think.....what song is that?

[shythatway]

Empty - Ray LaMontagne. Beautiful lyrics..

[ChemicalMadness]

Love me some Ray Lamontagne....especially his first album. Trouble?

[shythatway]

Don't think I've heard anything from his first, he's not that well know over here. I'll put it on my list :)

[ChemicalMadness]

Oh wow...it's a must.
Curious - where is "over here"?

[shythatway]

Ah. Ridiculously far north, well above the arctic circle. I speak elves fluently. *nods*

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The second stanza is truly remarkable. I enjoyed the entire piece, but wow those lines just struck a chord in me. You brought longing and passion to life in such a powerful and yet stillbeautiful way. I like the frenzy of the first stanza as well... love (and lust) do this to us sometimes. Very impressed.

[ChemicalMadness]

Thanks, GF!