Hold me

Hold me tight

like lies

like ivy

ravenous vines

embedded in my veins

admire me for years

slowly suffocate

my light

cover my truth in clever adornment

that others may see

only these, the leaves they’d hoped

to see

all the while beneath

your cover

we yet breathe

 

Cling to me

that I may find

comfort in your cover

cool like clover kisses

on tired soles

of trembling feet

subtle softness

inviting not to evade

but rather gently

invading my

soul

invited, yes

please conquer me

 

Rest me

complete

this life requieted

these dreams completed

find me one last time

that you may know my face

beyond these things

above these dreams

so that we may meet

in other worlds

no matter

the masks we wear

in that then

 

Hold me tight

like ivy

like lies

again

Reviews

[Graveyardfuck]

This is a beautiful poem. I love concrete poems because they show you a picture. The ivy made by the stanzas definetly deepens the meaning of the poem.
I also feel like I can relate to the words. Great write.

[Kristin Lee]

Intriguing. I like the ivy reference, holding one tight, the lies. All the buzz words relate back to this one seemingly beautify plant that can do so much damage when left unchecked. Beautiful write up.

[Georgia Gypsy]

Oh My!
Love like vines, covering smothering, nurturing, etc etc. I was caught up! Seeing the garden grow, go to seed, turn to weeds, and yet we are so easy to invite it back into our lives again, that same love that we know isn't healthy or sane for us.

The cadence was just perfect, soft and rhythmic.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, and still have pieces stuck in my head :)

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you so much for the read and sharing your thoughts...it's always so nice to hear my words interpreted and, of course, to know they resonate.

[Aisha Mnd]

Exquisite! I very much adore how you format your poems. I loved how you repeated the first portion (Hold me tight/like lies/like ivy) at the end, but the only alteration was the word ‘again’. Also, I liked how you took use of the word ‘invite’, and used it in three tenses, which I’ve quoted:

subtle softness
‘inviting’ not to evade
but rather gently
‘invading’ my
soul
‘invited’, yes
please conquer me

What you did there was quite ingenious!

Great job and keep it up!

- Aisha

[Emily B]

these are words to come back to

[Jordan Bryant]

Gorgeous poem. I think you could play with the form even more to make it look more like ivy because what you have is really beautiful. The line "we yet breathe" stuck out to be as not having same flow to it as the other lines, so maybe consider reordering the words or rephrasing. I agree with Girl Friday, I those closing lines are powerful and I think they would make a lovely tattoo :]

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Now, see, these are words I could have inked on my skin...

Hold me tight
like ivy
like lies
again

I'm not sure you quite understand the power that you weild with your words. I can see this written in cursive, scrawled across walls and skin. So beautiful, and yet so gritty and honest. You speak of the masks we wear and you speak of the place above our dreams...these things interest me. I'm fascinated by this write...into the library.

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you, GF...so glad this spoke to you.

[KeelyJane]

This is awesome. In form and in theme. I love the layout and the imagery in this was spectacular. You have such a gift and you truly are an inspiration. Thank you for sharing. As always, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece.

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you so much for your kind words...

[icelandicblue]

Your words create a vine of intense emotion. I loved these lines:

Hold me tight
like lies
like ivy
ravenous vines
embedded in my veins

Those would be great lyrics for a song. As it is it is a great poem.

[ChemicalMadness]

Thanks, ice. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is really moving...love the structure, the wording...

hold me close no matter what...even with our masks..just be with me...no matter how we have to do it. "know my face above the dreams" know the reality and still love me.

"like ivy/ like lies/ nice---and ivy climbs like lies...just keeps growing...sometimes we grow away from ourselves..and we hope others will remain by our side while we grow back to who we really are.

i don't know if we ever totally lose that.

[ChemicalMadness]

love your interpretation, Jacob. i'm always happy to see you've stopped by. thank you so much for sharing your thoughts...