Inevitable conclusions

I fear this is a touch too trite in many places, but thought I'd put it out there for review and let you decide...

I cannot
force
these leaves from trees
buds and blooms
defiant
will not
spring free

It seems today
they know
they see
set forth to bring
false hope
like fireworks
in May
joined together
pursed in protest
they will not
they cannot
stay

Mocked by pines
towering, taunting
unlikely captors surround
raining down
violating
in yellow green haze
poison pollen
laughs condescension
at such
pointless protest
they will
they must
confess
divulging brilliant disguise
laying fields of amorous lies
at the tired feet
of lovers
so lost
in waiting
so in need
of these our false
celebrations

Only in retreat
will they see
purple pedals pushed
round proud stamen
life impossibly proclaimed
nature herself could not
sustain
every flower
every leaf
every heart
every soul
they will
they must

Fall down

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I certainly don't see "trite" here. I see shreds of the traditional in this piece, as some before have mentioned, the fusing of nature and human nature and the way that things all seem to fit together like some grand, uncompleteable puzzle. I quite liked this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, i was thinking just what Emily said about Emily Dickinson...likingthis...

her fusing human nature with real nature was evident in so much of her work.
this does that...nice analogy.

jacob

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you!

[Emily B]

i have a feeling that Emily Dickinson would salute just such a piece of work, nothing trite or small or insignificant about these words at all

TOP SHELF :)

[ChemicalMadness]

As always, you are far too kind! Thank you so much...

[Emily B]

I may have to become your biggest fan so that I can shine a spotlight on your page whenever your doubts take over

[ChemicalMadness]

That could take up a lot of time! I'd have to start paying you ;). Accidental agent?

[Emily B]

i used to be the unofficial volunteer welcome wagon, the position got cut in the economic turndown, i guess that makes me a free agent now