In the Anywhere

Having fun with this one...now that I've figured out formatting when on an iPad..... I. don't. think. i'm. finished.

I don't know

what

this Anymore

is bringing me

I am not

in

the Anywhere

nor do I 

have

that pleasant

wrenching 

tension

riding shotgun

en route

to Anywhere

I am 

             Instead 

I am so 

            Otherwise

such a simple

occupation

of

space

 

molecules displaced

by my

own

here is where

I fear

my predicament 

resides

Molecular

Structural

Foundational

my Nowhereness

encoded

in my stem cells

programmed

to seek

sameness

compelled

by Anywhere

avoidance

 

Yet

that Somewhere

that silver slick

flash 

      of Everything

Still hangs

     in the air

and

         pleads

 with my Being

Hands held 

        shoulder high 

palms out 

carelessly

no affront

inkwell eyes 

     smiling 

      easily

Because

     I 

       know 

           why

 

Somewhere has been 

  courting

me

So long now 

a running joke

inside

between

famished glances

dancing in the smoke

her hair 

spilled 

carelessly

wet 

with abandon

her left thigh 

rides high

along my 

right

throat

exposed

flushed

          slick 

                red

beaded with salt-

lust

Taunting 

Mocking

Exposing

my Nothingness

Reviews

[Ees]

Love. Love. Love this.
it makes me nostalgic for missing dreams that I thought were real in the back of pick-up trucks that I never had. If that makes any sense to you... haha

This:
"nor do I
have
that pleasant
wrenching
tension
riding shotgun
en route
to Anywhere"-
about killed me. awesome.


Now, I might consider cutting some of it. It stretches on down the page for a minute too long for my tastes. I don't know how you feel about that, but it is something you may want to think over. Maybe somewhere in the middle. The ending was killer- perfect- the hair...

great job!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

How can there be empty thoughts out of your "nothingness"?... especially when overflowing with a wealth of emotions. I envision the beauty of this exposure... this untamed lust... taunting, yet exhilarating! Duality at it's most appealing..."Anywhere" is a nice place to be, if you ask me. ;)

[OBWhiteHawk]

Interesting approach, capitalizing words to emphasize them and making a very effective pattern with your words. I liked it.

[Azriel]

truly a great piece, loved the form and structure a lot, it all flowed so well, you can tell that it's not random at all and it's planned quite well. also loved your imagery and your choice of words a lot.

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you so much for taking the time to share your thoughts. As you know, all of these words line up and march as they're supposed to in your head, but you never know how they'll behave when you turn them loose ;). So glad you enjoyed!
CM

[Emily B]

i really enjoy your art, it is fresh, inventive and new

[ChemicalMadness]

I'm not used to sharing my work, not since my college days, anyway....so I'm equally not used to the praise, but it feels great to know your words have heft and leave a mark, isn't it? Thank you!

[Emily B]

welcome to this little corner of the café, looking forward to reading more of you

[eglantine]

I can taste a bit of ALlen Ginsberg influence in this poem--do you read his stuff? I'd try adding a few vibrant, singular images to really enhance the disorientation of oneself. This poem could be a lot of fun, structurally. Try playing with the entire space of the page. Thanks for sharing!

[ChemicalMadness]

I haven't read any Ginsberg, no. Now of course I'm curious...
Funny you mention structure, as I'd tried to post using a different format, but it kept reverting...since I'm new here, it's on of those things I've not figured out....not sure what I was doing wrong?

Again, I truly appreciate the insight. I feel I have a ways yet to go on this one and am excited to see where it runs me...

[ChemicalMadness]

a big THANK YOU to eglantine for encouraging me to post this with intended formatting...hopefully it reads much more as intended now.

[eglantine]

Love the formatting much better!