The Moons Secret

The moon holds my secrets. It's reflection shows me who I really am.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The moons reflection in the pond below

Beautiful and shinning brightly

It’s perfection tangible from afar

Yet it seems as if it’s right in front of me

 

My reflection tells a different story

It shows who I really am

Who I long to be

Yet it seems to far for me to reach

 

To everyone I am cold and distant

Never talking more than I have to

But the moon knows my secrets

Knows the person I am

 

The moon is my guidance

What gets me through my days

At night it holds me in is warm embrace

Comforting me in the only way it can

 

I admire it’s beauty

The ability to shine light on a dark world

Something I could never do

But something I will always dream of

 

The moon knows my true reflection

A secret it will always keep

The person I am

Will never be the person I want to be

 

But when I speak to the moon

It gives me the hope I need

That perhaps one day

I will shine light on the darkness

Author's Note

Just a really quick poem. I just wrote, without even thinking about what I was writing, and this is what came of it. Please tell me how you like it. I am trying to get myself into poetry. It is really hard though, because I am a very descriptive person. I like a lot of detail, and you just don't really have that with poetry.

Hope this doesn't just sound like a bunch of nonsense. Thats kind of what is sounds like to me. Haha. By the way, this is not supposed to be about me. Just some random girl I made up.

Reviews

[Tex]

I love this poem... Just love it. Some times what comes out in a fast write is the purest, cleanest, most direct write of all. That is true of this piece.

You might try writing a Haiku or two it will give you practice writing in a sparse style and putting great meaning in the fewest words possible. for one example of this you could check out "she loves me - She Pains me" a Haiku I wrote a while back.

I just love this piece, very well written. Great Job.

[Rathnashikamani]

I enjoyed this poem. It is well written with the lovely moon concept.
The imagery is vivid with appropriate wordings that make the poem alluring to the senses.
Started with a provocative reflection and ended with a very positive note.

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Truley beautiful. The moon can act as a friend, and guiding us through life- one we know we can share secrets with and have it not tell.
Beautiful job!

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[Marianne]

This is a beautiful poem. I think many people can relate to this in ways of how we view things. I really enjoyed reading this. keep up the fantastic work, Chellie.
cheers

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

LOVE IT! It's really beautiful along with the picture!

[SpokenWord]

I think this could be about many of us, as who we are isn't always who we want to be. Many secretes are held by the stars and constellations as to who we are in this world. In this poem I see a person who is lonely maybe by choice, she says no one really knows her but I venture to say she doesn't allow anyone to get close to her to know her. I think it is good as it is.

Poetry can be very descriptive it all depends in how long you want your poem to be and what you have to say in them. I hope you keep experimenting with poetry in the future.