The Moons Secret

The moon holds my secrets. It's reflection shows me who I really am.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The moons reflection in the pond below

Beautiful and shinning brightly

It’s perfection tangible from afar

Yet it seems as if it’s right in front of me

 

My reflection tells a different story

It shows who I really am

Who I long to be

Yet it seems to far for me to reach

 

To everyone I am cold and distant

Never talking more than I have to

But the moon knows my secrets

Knows the person I am

 

The moon is my guidance

What gets me through my days

At night it holds me in is warm embrace

Comforting me in the only way it can

 

I admire it’s beauty

The ability to shine light on a dark world

Something I could never do

But something I will always dream of

 

The moon knows my true reflection

A secret it will always keep

The person I am

Will never be the person I want to be

 

But when I speak to the moon

It gives me the hope I need

That perhaps one day

I will shine light on the darkness

Author's Note

Just a really quick poem. I just wrote, without even thinking about what I was writing, and this is what came of it. Please tell me how you like it. I am trying to get myself into poetry. It is really hard though, because I am a very descriptive person. I like a lot of detail, and you just don't really have that with poetry.

Hope this doesn't just sound like a bunch of nonsense. Thats kind of what is sounds like to me. Haha. By the way, this is not supposed to be about me. Just some random girl I made up.

Reviews

[Tex]

I love this poem... Just love it. Some times what comes out in a fast write is the purest, cleanest, most direct write of all. That is true of this piece.

You might try writing a Haiku or two it will give you practice writing in a sparse style and putting great meaning in the fewest words possible. for one example of this you could check out "she loves me - She Pains me" a Haiku I wrote a while back.

I just love this piece, very well written. Great Job.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

A beautiful poem
Thanks for entering into the real me contest

[Steven Westbrook]

Hello i am the second place winner in the straight from the heart contest you entered and i just wanna say congrats and this poem definatly did deserve #1 spot. your imagry is fluid and your language is whimsical. keep writing cause your darn good at it

[Seshat Nidaba]

I love the moon, she's terribly symoblic and you used her well, my rising sign is Cancer, and hence, the Moon is my symbolic ruler.

For a quick write, this was awefully good!

[Stella]

Wow! Great poem, I really loved how the picture that accomanied your poem fit perfectly which helped me visualize the setting. My favorite part of your poem was probably these lines:The moon is my guidance
What gets me through my days
At night it holds me in is warm embrace
Comforting me in the only way it can

[Mia Fin]

"The moon knows my true reflection

A secret it will always keep

The person I am

Will never be the person I want to be"

I LOVE this - so perfect and I know so many people can relate to this - amazing work :)

[.......]

This is brillant and indeed powerful. Such truth in this.

[Tate Morgan]

The moon knows my true reflection

A secret it will always keep

The person I am

Will never be the person I want to be

a BEAUTIFUL THING THIS WORK I am sorry i have not paid enough attention to all my friends I will try to I am newly married and have trouble with time now

[Jibey]

The idea is good - and I enjoyed it... but it does need a bit of polishing up to give the rhythm more of a chance... Keep working at poetry and don't give up!

It's = it is.. you meant its = belonging to it
shining, not shinning

*smiiling* .. grins