Heartless In Her Eyes

Turning away to pray
To an end to this pain I feel
From being ripped and torn
From birth to now,
No matter how hard I try
I am scorn...

From my eyes fall tears,
Holding memory's
I wish were not real
For I can not make them disappear

Worn and battered,
My reflection has made it clear why
I am heartless in her eyes

To lie to save face,
Was a mistake I can't take
Breaking a heart,
I couldn't wait to embrace
Now I'm left alone
To Accept my fate

Ready and willing,
To taste the bitter sweetness
Of a love and friendship
I will never replace

Closing my eyes,
To meet what cries inside of me
In every breath until my last,
I will hold no shame nearer,
From my past then the disgrace
That I am heartless In her eyes

Reviews

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Charles, you've penned a piece that many of us will be able to relate to...and it takes depth in a person to be able to admit being at fault in breaking another's heart... the sentiments you describe echo perfectly the guilt and regret we feel for making such huge mistakes... well-done

[Lyingwithlions]

Thank you so much for your review and comment.

[WhiteWolf]

This is great. It makes me a little sad though :( But then again, that's the point right?

[Writergirl]

I really felt this one, so glad you shared. It's written beautifully.

[Lyingwithlions]

Thank you. I've been going through my older poems. This is one that means a lot to me, and I believe helped me steer my life in a much better direction.

Thank you again for the nice review. :)

[Bear]

Question, did you mean to rhyme or did it just workout that way at the start?
Emotional read, and interesting prospective viewing yourself from her eyes like this. Thought provoking, might have to try and write one from this prospective. Thanks for the inspiration :~)

[Lyingwithlions]

Thank you for reading and for the comment. The answer to your question is yes, I like to make my poetry to rhyme. I find it challenging to put down what I'm feeling, especially in this fashion. For me, the hardest part is creating the first line. Once I have it, I just run with it and hope the flow stays smooth. After reading so many incredible pieces here at the Cafe, I have been inspired to try other forms as well. Talk about challenging: it's not easy at all after writing in this style for so long. Thanks again for reading! :)

[Bear]

Have you ever heard your work read out loud to you? It is a great writing tool, it lets you hear how well your timing is as well as how good the flow is. I use a text to voice program myself, it is the best polish tool a writer can have especially when trying out new writing styles :~)