Lemonade

A symbolistic poem. Requires reading into.

Lemons are a bitter fruit.
So then, why do we drink so much lemonade?
Sugar. We drink anything sweeter than water.

I drink the beverage.
Taking in the bittersweet taste
before spilling it onto the concrete.

Reviews

[MADAM]

hmmm, because of the last line I do have to think a bit so your right XD. I just think of this as a persons attraction to pain and pleasure or how people tend to go on a merry-go-round of emotions and do nothing about their problems. The lemons bitterness (representing pain) is what people are "attracted" to, wether they think so or not. I know a lot of people that have given up and it gets on my nerves when they don't do anything about their problems even though its not hard and i try to help them. Thats what I see it as, the drift in life where people become attracted to the bitterness. The sugar is pleasure, people try to drown out the pain with pleasure instead of doing something about it. It can range from the pleasure of being with another person (friend, boyfriend/girlfriend) to alcohol, to hobbies. Now for that very last line, I either take it as someone realizing that they need to do something about it and starting fresh (getting rid of the pain AND pleasure to start anew) OR committing suicide. Tell me if I'm right XD and thanks for entering this! Its short but contains a lot of depth, i love it^^)

[Chaz Hemsworth]

Well with poetry there is no "right" answer. Your interpretation I do like though. Just to clarify, the meaning is predominantly about suicide. Death is a "bad" thing, and people rarely embark lightly upon it. But death is the sugar, sweetening the bitterness of life. In short, death is tolerable because life is even worse. The second stanza is about being ambivalent about killing oneself. Make of the last line what you will.

[MADAM]

Ah, I can see that, thank you for the clarification^^)

[JT Godin]

This is well written. However, I don't mean this negatively; it's not my cup of 'tea'.

Something that you did which I really appreciate: brevity -- something I'm not too good at. If I were Pound speaking to Eliot (which I'm most certainly not, but am attempting to set the scene) I would say, take out the conjunctions.

In any case; as I mentioned it is well written, but I suppose for me personally it feels a little prosey. Not that there's anything wrong with that.

[Annabelle Lee]

A lot like falling in love.

"Lovie is a bitter thing
So then, why do we try so hard to find it?
Company. We need to think we are not alone.

I look for love
I dabble in the experience
before spilling my pride through my tearducts"

Just my interpretation :)

[Frontier]

That third line, yes, sugar...we do drink anything sweeter than water, because water is nothingness, which is unbearable to most of us.

[Augustus Waters]

Very unique. It can be interpreted in a number of ways, and that's what makes it more intriguing than the other poems I have read or written.